Undergraduate / "Confessions of a poor student" [20]

Hello everyone,
please read my essay and tell me what you think about it. It needs to be 1200 characters or less. I really want to get into this university. Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks!

Redemption. I'm a student who's seeking academic redemption after doing poorly in college. My family wanted me to become a physician; they didn't care what kind just as long as I made a lot of money. So I took up chemistry and biology classes hoping eventually things like carbon atoms and anatomy would grow on me. This didn't happen; instead I was miserable which caused my grades to suffer.

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