Undergraduate / Is God real? Is it true that He's there in times of my deepest sorrow? [7]

I think you should improve the coherence of your essay.
The flow of your essay is I guess, a bit too fast.
From the question alone, you will know that
what you should write is a narrative essay.
you should focus more on the feelings
you felt and relate it to the readers.
your essay should have more descriptions
on what happened, how it happened
what you felt. and you should have strong
connection from one paragraph
to another. :)
please take this as a constructive criticism

BTW, are you applying at Ateneo De Manila?

Undergraduate / Knowing oneself, is the beginning of all wisdom - the purest reflection of me in a mirror [9]

hmm. I have read an essay somewhat similar to yours.
especially in this part:


and the other "mirror" parts.
No offense meant.

Oh! BTW, are you applying at Ateneo De Manila University?
If you are please PM me at
sharl_cureg@
(If you don't mind :) )

Undergraduate / Knowing oneself, is the beginning of all wisdom - the purest reflection of me in a mirror [9]


coincidence. guess so. hmmm.
but I'm pretty sure I read those words already.
An essay of a student applying for YALE university.
good luck on this. :)