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Feb 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives [6]
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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
In our contemporary world music plays the main role almost in all countries. However, there are vivid disputes regarding the impact of international music to society among all walks of life. Before drawing a conclusion all the pros and cons should be assessed.
First of all, tradition music can be considered as the history and culture of the nation. In ancient times music was one the sources of entertainment and it remains today, every nation had it's own style of music, thus nowadays traditional music varies and it can be noted that it remains as the pride of nation.
Secondly, international music is spread and it is particularly popular among adolescents, thereby in all probability the value of their traditional music decreases. Suffice it to say that music is one the giant industry in the entertainment sphere, thus artists endeavor to broadcast their song globally.
Last but not least, it should be taken into account that there are many genres of music and they seem to be uncountable, furthermore it can be said that people listen to different music genres, as the proverb says tastes differ. The sparks of genres acquired in different parts of the planet, therefore, it can explain why international music is popular everywhere.
To recapitulate, music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives. But people should have to value their traditional music instead of international. Customs and traditions are the main cultural achievements of the nations, therefore the crux of the matter still remains unsolved.
Please check my essay. Show me my weak parts and if possible rate it with IELTS band
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
In our contemporary world music plays the main role almost in all countries. However, there are vivid disputes regarding the impact of international music to society among all walks of life. Before drawing a conclusion all the pros and cons should be assessed.
First of all, tradition music can be considered as the history and culture of the nation. In ancient times music was one the sources of entertainment and it remains today, every nation had it's own style of music, thus nowadays traditional music varies and it can be noted that it remains as the pride of nation.
Secondly, international music is spread and it is particularly popular among adolescents, thereby in all probability the value of their traditional music decreases. Suffice it to say that music is one the giant industry in the entertainment sphere, thus artists endeavor to broadcast their song globally.
Last but not least, it should be taken into account that there are many genres of music and they seem to be uncountable, furthermore it can be said that people listen to different music genres, as the proverb says tastes differ. The sparks of genres acquired in different parts of the planet, therefore, it can explain why international music is popular everywhere.
To recapitulate, music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives. But people should have to value their traditional music instead of international. Customs and traditions are the main cultural achievements of the nations, therefore the crux of the matter still remains unsolved.