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Posts by HuuHoa
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HuuHoa   
Jan 6, 2011
Undergraduate / What are the main factors that contribute to good health? [3]

Hello,

I'm first time to post my writing product on your website. I would your help with an appreciation. Thank you very much for your kindly help.

My topic: What are the main factors that contribute to good health?

Our health is the most important thing that we really have in the world. We may take away our house or money, we can survive. However, without our health we will die. For me, being healthy eating, no smoking and keep up my social life are the main factors that contribute to my good health.

Healthy eating is an important thing to maintain my good health. Many people cannot deny that eating high-fat food like French fries and hamburger leads us to obesity and some cardiovascular disease, so I try to limit and also control the mount of animal protein I consume. In addition, I eat more vegetable and fresh fruit which are rich in fiber and vitamins in my daily meal. It helps me not only have a normal blood pressure, but also get a good shape.

Of course, many people believe that nonsmoking is another factor that contribute to our good health. Studies have shown that smoking people usually get some serious disease like high pressure and heart attack than nonsmoker. Besides, smoking may cause lung cancer. That is why scientist has said smoking is harmful to our health. I believe too.

Also, friends are an important part of one's health. Studies have shown that people with a wide range of social contacts get fewer complaints and loneliness than people who don't. Laughing is another important part of health. I like to laugh with my friends and I always feel better when I am with them than I am alone.

In short, by eating properly and no smoking, it helps me stay in good shape and avoid some serious disease. By spending my time with my friends, I can keep in mind happiness. Both are all part of thing that helps me stay in good health.
HuuHoa   
Aug 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / [IELTS]Task 2: Generally believed that some people are born with certain talents [4]

HI sharman

pls note that an essay body will have at least two paragraphs which will prove what you stated at opening...
See that your sentences about Mike Schumacher are just a example for previous sentence.

what about "Generally when people find certain amount of elegance in the way people play and win or sing and attract audience they tag those people saying they were born with talent."

when u put in new line, it means that you are beginning new paragraph, but only sentence can not make a paragraph.
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