Graduate / 'scientific research in China' - 1st draft SoP of Computational Math [6]

Would you please tell me how do you feel with the opening, does it eye-catching or not? Any advise would be highly appreciate!

Maybe when Americans are little, they dreamed about being an astronomer or a doctor or a lawyer. While in the circumstance in China when I was young, most of the children stuck with Scientists, because Scientists seems to be extremely smart, they doing jobs of discover mysteries. The time when my nebulous childhood dream...