tiffateyou
Oct 24, 2010
Undergraduate / As I sit at dawn, the rising sun hovers over the awoken daisy: Personal Statment 2011 [3]
Hey guys! I'm stressing out so bad right now from all the college apps and what not... I really need help on revising the first prompt. Please and thanks :]
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)- Describe the world you come from - for example, your family your community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
As I sit at dawn, the rising sun hovers over the awoken daisy. As minutes pass, the shadow casted upon the gradually dissipates, the sun is now shining down on the blue daisy at a sharp angle. Holding my bulky Canon Rebel XSi, I capture the contrast of the vibrant beauty of the bright blue petal with the bleakness of the deep navy shade of the petals in the shade. I have always loved to compose and frame the beauty of flowers. To me, flowers represent the beauty and logic of nature and science. To me, flowers help me understand nature better.
My mother and father immigrated to the United States from Shanghai, China in their later years in life. Like many parents, mine wanted my brother and me to succeed and pursue our interests and goals. They would give up all their dreams for us to have a good future. In order for us to be granted these opportunities, my mother, hardworking and persistent, decided to take a full time job to work for the U.S. Postal Service, while my dad worked at various hotels as a banquets waiter. My parents proceeded to carry the heavy burdens of workload that had inconspicuously implanted within their shoulders. My mother was able to stand firmly to hold her ground until February of 2004. She became ill and was eventually diagnosed with thyroid cancer After weeks of extensive amounts of aggressive chemotherapy and radiation treatments, her body began to deteriorate drastically. I had to mature almost overnight and to take care of my younger brother. For days, my mother laid in bed writhing in pain. She could not speak to us nor get out of bed. As days ended with piteous crying, I knew I could not do anything to ease or relieve the pain my mother has suffered through. This made me wonder, why? Why I swore that if I could ever become a doctor, I would never let anybody suffer like that.
I want to be a doctor, a doctor that has the understanding of nature of a scientist, the knowledge of a philosopher, and the insight of a photographer. Photographing daisies and other flowers or plants has deepened my gratitude for nature. A daisy may look like a simple flower, but in reality it is a composite of several different parts joining to form the flower. Each aspect and crevice of the flower represents a higher truth in nature, the truths that are revealed in the study of science. A good doctor will know that differences in nature are natural. An imperfection is part of nature, and therefore, is beautiful. The logic of science is beautiful to me. Each element connects with another concept or theory in a different field. Science is a channel through which I understand and conceive reality.
Hey guys! I'm stressing out so bad right now from all the college apps and what not... I really need help on revising the first prompt. Please and thanks :]
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)- Describe the world you come from - for example, your family your community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
As I sit at dawn, the rising sun hovers over the awoken daisy. As minutes pass, the shadow casted upon the gradually dissipates, the sun is now shining down on the blue daisy at a sharp angle. Holding my bulky Canon Rebel XSi, I capture the contrast of the vibrant beauty of the bright blue petal with the bleakness of the deep navy shade of the petals in the shade. I have always loved to compose and frame the beauty of flowers. To me, flowers represent the beauty and logic of nature and science. To me, flowers help me understand nature better.
My mother and father immigrated to the United States from Shanghai, China in their later years in life. Like many parents, mine wanted my brother and me to succeed and pursue our interests and goals. They would give up all their dreams for us to have a good future. In order for us to be granted these opportunities, my mother, hardworking and persistent, decided to take a full time job to work for the U.S. Postal Service, while my dad worked at various hotels as a banquets waiter. My parents proceeded to carry the heavy burdens of workload that had inconspicuously implanted within their shoulders. My mother was able to stand firmly to hold her ground until February of 2004. She became ill and was eventually diagnosed with thyroid cancer After weeks of extensive amounts of aggressive chemotherapy and radiation treatments, her body began to deteriorate drastically. I had to mature almost overnight and to take care of my younger brother. For days, my mother laid in bed writhing in pain. She could not speak to us nor get out of bed. As days ended with piteous crying, I knew I could not do anything to ease or relieve the pain my mother has suffered through. This made me wonder, why? Why I swore that if I could ever become a doctor, I would never let anybody suffer like that.
I want to be a doctor, a doctor that has the understanding of nature of a scientist, the knowledge of a philosopher, and the insight of a photographer. Photographing daisies and other flowers or plants has deepened my gratitude for nature. A daisy may look like a simple flower, but in reality it is a composite of several different parts joining to form the flower. Each aspect and crevice of the flower represents a higher truth in nature, the truths that are revealed in the study of science. A good doctor will know that differences in nature are natural. An imperfection is part of nature, and therefore, is beautiful. The logic of science is beautiful to me. Each element connects with another concept or theory in a different field. Science is a channel through which I understand and conceive reality.