Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Posts by saracoo
Joined: Oct 29, 2010
Last Post: Nov 23, 2010
Threads: 1
Posts: 4  

Displayed posts: 5
sort: Oldest first   Latest first  | 
saracoo   
Nov 21, 2010
Writing Feedback / It is not good to move to a new city because you will lose old friends. [4]

Topic: It is not good to move to a new city because you will lose old friends.

With the improvement of social mobility, increasing number of people move to new city for better career or higher education. Yet, there are some of them concerning about losing old friends as they leave. They hesitate of moving to fresh environment. But, I disagree with this idea for following reasons.

To begin with, moving to a new city doesn't necessary cause people losing old friendship. The real reason of breaking up friendship is disconnection and misunderstanding. If a person can keep contact with their old friends and give them emotion or physical support as they encounter troubles, he will have the great opportunity to keep those precious friendships. In fact, old friends don't have to live in the same city and meet everyday. By chatting through internet, phoning each other once for a while, or visiting one another during summer holiday, they could still share happiness, sadness, and even some secrets. Maybe when they find out their emotion bond still exist after separating in the different city for years, their friendship will be strengthened.

Not only a person wouldn't easy lose friends out of changing city, but his old buddy may come after him if he lives comfortably in new environment. After an individual receives a higher education, a better working opportunity at new place, he probably will become a more competitive person. His friend woulds love to contact with him or even follow him to the new city for those advantages.

Moreover, even if people will lose some of old friends and be alone for a while after changing environment, they still shouldn't doubt about pursuing greater conditions in the new city. Friends are virtually very easy to make. One of my friends starts building new friendship with surrounding people as soon as she moves to New York City. After attending many parties and helping several neighbors, she has boarder connections now than before. Not very long, these new friends will become her old friends and she won't feel lonely anymore. So if a person worries about being alone after going to strange city, he/she should overcome these troubles by blending in rather than hesitating.

In conclusion, people shouldn't stop going to more suitable living conditions because of fearing to lose old friendship. There are many methods to keep those old friends, and make new friends at the fresh environment. Young adults should embrace the changes happened in their lives and expect new challenges from outside world.

Chong
saracoo   
Nov 21, 2010
Writing Feedback / Getting message from different news resources to understand events under more objective perspective. [10]

Hi, Lee,

Thanks. I do feel the conclusion is quite weak.
How about this oneļ¼š

"...
....
In conclusion, it is necessary to get information from all kinds of news resources for being well-informed. Reading articles from various experts' perspective will help us understand the info from different aspects. Collecting the arguments from opposite standpoints could prevent us from holding biased opinion. Therefore, citizens should try to access as many types of news as possible."

Ah, by the way, Stridercoo=saracoo. Both of them are my IDs. :D
saracoo   
Nov 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / It is not good to move to a new city because you will lose old friends. [4]

Hi SHALMA,

Thank you so much for the great suggestions. I truly like them.

In the third paragraph, I initially want to say that a person's old friends will most likely follow him to moving to the same city afterward; as a result, they can still stay together. But, I guess it's not a strong supporting idea and I shouldn't use the double negative.

I do have issues with sentence structure. I do. It's freaking my out. I hope I could find a English Teacher in the future.

Thanks again for the help. You're very kind. BEST WISHES SHALMA :)
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳