Writing Feedback / Is cheating in school and work out of control? [2]

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Is cheating at school out of control?

Cheating nowadays has many words but actually it has the same meaning. There is no different between cheating in the school or work .all of them lead to destruction. people see cheating is out of control which cannot stop it.

People don't care about damages which can effect on whole parts of this world. Cheating destroy education structure, education is very important which lead the country to bright future. On the other word, everything here is depending on education like computers without education there is no way to produce or develop it. Cheating destroy society which breaks relations between people, families and friends .For example, relations break when customer buy from someone and after that he notice this seller cheat him. Cheating also destroy economics of country where people steal huge amount of money from country and go abroad of this country with the money.it can completely reduce the rate of country's currency .

Cheating is out control which people cannot stop it but they can reduce it by many ways .First of all, person should remove cheating from heart because people sometimes follow others. Second, Government must punish cheaters to protect society from previously dangerous. Finally, families should teach and educate all members about cheating problems.

In conclusion, cheating is out of control but everyone in this big world must Struggle cheating in order to reduce it who known maybe cheating disappear later .

Writing Feedback / Are we too dependent on computers? [6]

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11. Are we too dependent on computers?
Nowadays, there is no place with electricity doesn't have computers which is necessary for workers, scientists and students .Therefore, people depend on computers which they do everything necessary or unnecessary. Computers users ignore risks and problems of using this electronic machine. Computers threat human health's which affect on eyes, brain and macules and more .it's not only threat human bodies but also destroys relations and makes people so lazy.

Computers users suffer from diseases and health risks .They don't known that setting on front of computer for a long time is very dangerous. Radiation comes from screen affect on eyes which computers users cannot see everything clearly with high resolution or real scene. Magnetic field affect on brain which can't arrange memories correctly. Computers also affect on macules because the main substances in blood doesn't reach to macules which need those substances to make power and move.

Computer cuts all relations between people .Computer users who work on the computer for long time haven't enough time for talking or contacting with society .The real communication when people talk directly from speaker moth to listener ear so the relation complicated with computers users and other especially when they use it for long time .another problem when we depend on computer which makes people so lazy .The biggest problem when the computers stop working ,people cannot do computer work because they accustomed on using the computer.

In conclusion, depending on computers have many risks and problem in health or society.