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Nov 3, 2010
Undergraduate / "A Family, drugs and alcohol - who has shaped my dreams and aspirations" [3]

UC Essay Prompt #1 - Describe the World you come from and how is has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Constructive Criticsm would be GREATLY appreciated :) Thank You

We often hear of families coming in different shapes and sizes, and if this is the truth, then mine should be considered huge. By huge I simply do not mean big in size, but rather filled to the bursting point with knowledge, stories, experiences, advice, and guidance. I grew up as a child with parents who divorced when I was a year old, yet this never seemed to slow me down or get in the way of my goals and aspirations of becoming a veterinarian.

My life began in a house located on a narrow, oak-lined street illuminated with sunshine and surrounded by devoted family members. As a child, I was raised by a single mother and guided through life by my two older sisters. Although this may seem like the ideal childhood, I was exposed to the trials and tribulations of what life can create in a matter of seconds. Despite the fact that we are more of a family now then we have ever been, there was a point in my life where my sisters decided to turn down the wrong path and I turned the exact opposite way. I have experienced firsthand how drugs and alcohol can injure a family, and what it takes from a mother to pull everything back together. I have always admired the determination of my family members because it has allowed me to be the best student, daughter, and friend I could possibly be.
jessielee707   
Nov 3, 2010
Undergraduate / "A Family, drugs and alcohol - who has shaped my dreams and aspirations" [3]

Growing up with an array of many possibilities for the future would have left most children bewildered and lacking decision, but for me it was a decision that had already been settled. As adolescents, a close friend and I use to set up a "vet office" and have her parents bring in beanie baby animals that were in need of medical attention. From there, we would put on our scrubs, get out our stethoscopes, thermometers, and medical tape and stay entertained for hours. Its time such as these that kept me ambitious and determined to follow the path I had set my mind and future on.
jessielee707   
Nov 3, 2010
Undergraduate / "Born in Mexico City, I came to the United States" - UC prompt 1: Plastic Life [4]

I am not very good at corrections but just wanted to let you know that this has been one of the most captivating essays I have read yet! The begining had me hooked, which led me to the middle of the writing which didnt lose my interest at all. Very nice job!!!! Im glad you have found the person that you really are and good luck with everything in your future :)
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