Writing Feedback / Mandy, a beautiful black dog - Write a descriptive paragraph [4]

I would appreciate some help with my descriptive paragraph.

Mandy was my beautiful black and grey shitsu dog. She walked gracefully and barked quite fearlessly. Whenever she had the chance, she would spend most of her time outdoors chasing colourful butterflies and rolling around in the grass. Mandy was quite finicky when it came to visitors and the food she ate. I came to notice that she befriended people with a more calm personality and thoes who seem to be charming dog lovers. Others she would get uncontrollable furious at, and would go back and forth barking and growling. as for food she rather to have her pedigree mixed with sausage and egg, not exactly what a dog should be fed. Unlike most dogs Mandy enjoys taking baths, getting her hair blow dried and being powdered with flea control.

Writing Feedback / A persuasive essay: 'Death penalty should be abolished' for or against [6]

My teacher asked that I wrote a persuasive essay in favor of or against the topic 'Death penalty should be abolished' Please help, by making the necessary corrections- thank you!

In the eighteenth century, death penalty was used as the severe Punishment if a Person disobeyed the laws. Death penalty also known as Capital Punishment is the judicially ordered execution of a prisoner for a serious crime. The court, who administers the law enacted by parliament, will, after conviction of a criminal who has done serious offence, sentence him to be killed.

It is believed by many, particularly those of religious persuasion that this type of punishment is inhumane and the practice should be abolished. I personally disagree with this opinion for several reasons.

As Stated above, death penalty is generally ordered where the crime is a serious offence such as murder. The courts have generally seen their task of fitting the punishment to the crime perpetrated. Thus the sentence should adequately reflect the revulsion felt by the victims and citizen. Sentencing should not only be appropriate bu should deter the wrong doer from repeating the offence. As a matter of fact it should serve as a deterrence, retribution, rehabilitation, resititution, incapacitation and denunciation.

Crime has become so prevalent in our society that people are no crippled with fear. Fear of being robbed, raped and murdered. In societies that have abolished the death penalty, prison cells are over crowded and many of them are repeat offenders who, despite their incarceration are still actively involved in orchestrating criminal offences. It therefore means that imprisonment is not as effective as it ought to be. If many of these offenders were given death penalty then the number of crimes recorded would be less. The aim of any government is to ensure that the citizens are safe and if they live in constant fear then it means that the government has not achieved its objective, at least one. In addition to this, it is tax payers' money that is being used to finance the exorbitant budget that these penal institutions present year to year.

Imagine my child being murdered by a serial killer and I must finance his expenses. Ironic or preposterous, this should not be!

This topic propelled extensive research for arguments in favor and against the topic. I noticed that majority of the persons, who wrote, agreeing to the topic, mentioned that death penalty should be abolished because the Bible said so. This led me to go back to the Bible. I was amazed at what I found, in the Old Testament; the Lord said that it is okay to give a man Capital punishment if he has committed serious crime. Then in the New Testament he said we should not take the life of another man but if that man disobeys the laws of his country then he shall be punished equally according to what he had done.

Capital punishment is not an act we wish to place on a single soul, but it is the best way to keep the killer out of society and prevent any further murders. Does the death penalty deter crime? There is no concrete evidence of either positive or negative effect. But this does not mean it would not help lower the crime rate. We need to understand that the best way to prevent any possible murders in the future is not let the killer walk free. Death penalty allows us to see the seriousness of a crime and the value of life.