Undergraduate / "Crossing Bridges" - UC Prompt 1/Common App Essay. Too Stereotypical? [5]

you could have used some other transitions as well. but all in all the essay was excellent i would say.
thanks
aurin.

Writing Feedback / Describing my partner, Khalid (my best classmate) [3]

he does not get mad very easily.there are many spelling mistakes i can see. e.g than instead of then.anyways it was a nice try .

thanks aurin.