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Posts by skayode
Joined: Dec 7, 2010
Last Post: Aug 29, 2011
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skayode   
Dec 7, 2010
Undergraduate / Morgan State - to make a decision to join this school [3]

WHY I WANT TO GET ADMITTED INTO MORGAN STATE UNIVERSITY

Most times, every individual is faced with a life-changing decision in which he or she is to make a decision. I realized that choosing a university is one of these important decisions after finishing high school. When I finished my high school, I was faced with this decision and after thorough research on the university I wanted to go, and I have finally made the right choice by applying to Morgan State University. While I was in high school, my father, who is my closest companion, usually advice me on decision-making: He often says that men who make choices have reasons for making them. Therefore, I have chosen Morgan State University and the reasons why I have chosen it would be discussed.

To start with, Morgan State University is enriched with excellent facilities that breed up studious and experienced student. These facilities include a well-stocked library, well-equipped sport centers, a good student-to-lecturer ratio, an excellently-built campus facility and an adequate research center. From my researches and seminars that I have attended, Educationists have made me to know that an excellent conducive environment supplement good teaching abilities which will bring about the output of great and experienced students.

Moreover, Morgan State University has good lecturers and specialists for my major -Medicine. Morgan State University has produced renowned doctors who have been recognized because of their competence. An example of these people is Mr. Cummings. With these achievements made in medicine, I hope to be like those who have made it and I believe that the first step in becoming a renowned doctor too is by attending the universities they attended and learn what they have learnt. Hence, I believe that the good administration has succeeded in bringing up leaders.

Furthermore, the cultural diversity has arrested my interest. The excellent logo of a lion and even the unique motto "Success: it is all about experience" has made ...
skayode   
Feb 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-experience or born traits?which is more effective? [6]

I think you should not start that essay that way.For instance, starting with a fact like "it is said that the first impression is the last impression" born-inborn for- than FLUCTUATION OF TENSES. i THINK I LIKE YOUR ESSAY, IT IS WONDERFUL BUT FEW ERRORS.THANKS
skayode   
Feb 9, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY The importance of robots and their influences [3]

the first mistake is that 'today's modern life serve as a tautology'. why not "nowadays". pls find a fact to start with. you never stated which side you are on; either the negative or the positive side. please one point-one paragraph. you need to state your position in the first paragraph. i love your essay it is wonderful!
skayode   
Aug 29, 2011
Writing Feedback / Ielts: Telecommuting and working at home [2]

Actually, i think there is a fault in your first paragraph. You can start with a fact, not necessarily with the definition. make sure your fact is a concrete one. I don't understand the meaning of 'more and more". i feel you can easily say"a lot". some minor grammatical errors. NO. you don't put your main reason for writing the essay in the second paragraph; it's meant to be in the first paragraph dear.

Actually, it is nice you start with your topic sentence, but there is a lot of ways you can do that in which your approach will be beautiful. never abbreviate in an essay- simply say what it means and put in bracket the shortened form, that way you educating the reader. I don't really like the way you constructed your 3rd paragraph. re-write the essay and i will re- check it if i'm less busy.
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