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hyebyekadal   
Dec 18, 2010
Undergraduate / UMichigan Engineering Essays, World Economic Forum [3]

Hey everyone,
this is my first time posting on this forum and I am so glad to see so many helping people!
These are my UMichigan Engineering Essays.
Would love your feedbacks and suggestions.
Thanking you all in advance!


Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

Having both in the United States and India, and currently studying in an International School I have always felt as never belonging to one specific community and regard myself as being more of a global citizen. But a community can also be defined as "set of people having common goals and shared interests in". In this context I belong to a community of youth interested in environmental protection and sustainable technologies . I have always believed it'd be part of my responsibility to take active participation wherever I can. I tried to make an impact to the world as much as I could. I started to regularly volunteer at a mass tree planting campaign in my area credited with President's Award and a Guinness record for planting largest number of trees in a single day.

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Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests? (500 words maximum)

Over the last century engineering innovations have pervaded nearly aspects of our life in this planet. But these advancements had their drawbacks too.

Our dependence on fossil fuels and non-renewable sources of energy for electricity has left our planet in a global dilemma. From this stems the imperative need for innovative engineering in the areas of green and alternate energy. As a keen environmental protectionist and academically bright student, I want to pursue entrepreneurial ventures in the field of alternative energy. As a prospective engineering student, I know that an engineer has the potential to turn what others regard only as an "abstract idea" into reality.

But for such a path, the right launching pad is crucial: A multi-disciplinary environment where I can interact with bright students from all around the world supported by the best of professors; A place where the right eco-system is provided to nurture and encourage certain skills and advantages that will surely leverage my success in the real world; A place where engineers are not daunted by real world challenges; A place like University of Michigan.

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hyebyekadal   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / Volunteering: JHU - activities outside of class. [2]

Hmmm... Overall this is a well-written essay..you've covered all the points they have prompted, but I feel the ending is kind of abrupt..write something more enthusiastic. And are you sure you have the right word length? If not you can actually elaborate more on what you do and how you can connect it with whatever students do at John Hopkins.

Hope this helps Bhai!
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