sstb2113
Dec 21, 2010
Undergraduate / CU Boulder: "Unique Essay" [2]
So I've started this essay a couple hundred times and I'd like to get confirmation that my intro paragraph relates to the topic and is well written before I continue this time. Please, recommendations and criticism will help.
Topic:
Essay A (500 words maximum) The University of Colorado Boulder's Flagship 2030 strategic plan promotes exceptional teaching, research, scholarship, creative works, and service distinguishing us as a premier university. We strive to foster a diverse and inclusive community for all that engages each member in opportunities for academic excellence, leadership, and a deeper understanding of the world in which we live. Given the statement above, how do you think you could enrich our diverse and inclusive community and what are your hopes for your college experience?
So far...
Two years ago if you asked me what made me unique, I wouldn't have had a clue. My early years of high school saw an unmotivated, boring student. But a series of events that have occurred during the past two years have changed my attitude and perspective towards the world. Changing schools, participating in a community service trip, and leaving the country for the first time all played part in the discovery of my passions and aspirations.
So I've started this essay a couple hundred times and I'd like to get confirmation that my intro paragraph relates to the topic and is well written before I continue this time. Please, recommendations and criticism will help.
Topic:
Essay A (500 words maximum) The University of Colorado Boulder's Flagship 2030 strategic plan promotes exceptional teaching, research, scholarship, creative works, and service distinguishing us as a premier university. We strive to foster a diverse and inclusive community for all that engages each member in opportunities for academic excellence, leadership, and a deeper understanding of the world in which we live. Given the statement above, how do you think you could enrich our diverse and inclusive community and what are your hopes for your college experience?
So far...
Two years ago if you asked me what made me unique, I wouldn't have had a clue. My early years of high school saw an unmotivated, boring student. But a series of events that have occurred during the past two years have changed my attitude and perspective towards the world. Changing schools, participating in a community service trip, and leaving the country for the first time all played part in the discovery of my passions and aspirations.