Undergraduate / "I smile to myself as I picture my future" - why upenn [7]

Wow, your writing style is amazing. I really enjoyed ur details, especially verdant grass. I love the word verdant. One suggestion that I have is to talk about the specific school in the University that you are applying to. Talk about a certain course or certain skills that you will learn at the school.

Undergraduate / "I smile to myself as I picture my future" - why upenn [7]

You need to talk about the specific college in Upenn you are applying to. If you're applying to Wharton, for example, talk about some courses or a certain field of study that appeals to you and why. You are answering the broader Upenn part but not the specific.