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Posts by huangd13
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huangd13   
Dec 28, 2010
Undergraduate / "education and community" Why Columbia Short Answer Essay [3]

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why:

I consider both education and community to be the primary criteria in determining my ideal university; in my opinion, Columbia is the manifestation of this ideal, with its unparalleled Core Curriculum and its diverse and integrated student body. I cannot help but be drawn to the tactfully-designed Core because it satisfies my standards for the perfect liberal education and it provides me with the academic challenge that I have sought for so long. I cannot wait to begin my studies at Columbia immersed into the thought-provoking tales told by Homer, the father of epic poetry, while taking pleasure in the sciences as part of the broad curriculum that is offered at Columbia. I have no doubt that my experience learning in the Core Curriculum will be greatly augmented by the diversified student body, as the multicultural environment will provoke various unprecedented and intriguing viewpoints. Being in an international school, I have had firsthand experience dealing with culturally-distinct individuals, and it is through our heated discussions that I am able to develop completely new perspectives on certain issues. I am excited to say the least at the prospects of being included in Columbia University. Not only will I receive the well-rounded and rigorous education that I have sought for my entire high school life, but I will also be exposed to a diverse cultural center that fosters fresh, global perspectives.

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huangd13   
Dec 28, 2010
Scholarship / "my favorite subjects are English and History" - Gates Millennium [3]

I think the first sentence can definitely be improved. "Growing in school" sounds a little awkward to start an essay, and the sentence itself doesn't really grab the reader's attention. As for completing the essay, I agree that you it would be nice for you to expand on the learning process, perhaps pick one specific experience in the classroom to illustrate the active learning process, and link that to your burgeoning interests in english and history. Preferably a really exciting classroom experience that has the potential to really engage the reader!

Overall, it's a good start! Thanks for commenting on my essay btw... u made a good point :)
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