Essays / Other ways to incorporate a quote? [10]

Hi Sarah,

"Without the vigilant eye of a parent watching over her, Victoria adapts to adulthood by making reckless mistakes, some of which may have perpetual effects. "

Is this sentence redundant? vigilant and watching. is there a better way to repharse it?

Does this sentence make sense and is there a better way to repharse it?: Victoria's blunder has caused her to be the center of mockery.

Thanks so much!

Essays / Other ways to incorporate a quote? [10]

o yea opps I need to watch out for tenses.

is it
Victoria is push from one house to another until she and her baby finally seeks refuge at the McPherons.

or

Victoria is pushed from one house to another until she and her baby finally seeks refuge at the McPherons.

if its to be in present tense, not perfect tense.

is this sentence also in present tense?

" Dwayne could have easily caused brain damage to the baby. "

Thanks

Essays / Other ways to incorporate a quote? [10]

is there a way to combine or improve on these three sentences?

Victoria has only been acquainted with Dwayne for only a year and half. It takes more than two years to really know a person. She doesn't know anything about him.

Thanks

Grammar, Usage / Correct word use? "Without a leader to guide our people..." [4]

I thought liberal arts only included writing, reading and history.. not math and science.

"Topic: With the increasing importance of science and technology in the workplace, a liberal arts education is of little value for tomorrow's college graduates. What is your opinion of the idea that a liberal arts education will be of little value to college graduates in the future?"

the topic dosen't make sense if liberal arts inclueded math and science.

thanks for your help

Grammar, Usage / Correct word use? "Without a leader to guide our people..." [4]

also is this sentence redundant?
"Liberal arts is just as important in our society as science and technology. Without it our society would be in a maelstrom of confusion. "

maelstrom and confusion, since malestrom already has a confusing apect to it.