Undergraduate / "Haiti's capital earthquake" - UCF essay (short) [4]

I like it but I agree with Anonymoussenior, that they'd probably be looking for something that related more to you. Other than that it's fine. If you chose to keep this I would advise you to explore how this affected you more in depth, like how you felt and if you were able to overcome anything through the scare of your father's death.

please read mine!!

Undergraduate / "Korean tutoring" - PRINCETON summers essay [3]

I really liked the first one with Minsho. I reread it twice and I can't think of anything to change in it. So I think that you should definitely continue with this theme if you are able to! But if something amazing happened in your summer journalism camp you should talk about that too and then maybe add an extra paragraph talking about how both summers compared.

could you please review mine?