xoreverie
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / UVA: My Dreams - Discuss your favorite place to get lost. [2]
This is my first draft, so can someone please leave me some helpful feedback/comments about my essay? This is my last one and I'm done. Help is greatly appreciated! :)
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I know of a place that only I can enter. It is best accessed when I'm in the comfort of my own bed, resting between the sheets. As I close my eyes, within a matter of minutes or perhaps hours, my mind creates a world shaped by my thoughts and aspirations. During the late hours of the night, up until sunrise, I am lost in my own dreams.
One night, usually Monday nights after watching Gossip Girl, I may live the life of Blair Waldorf, "the queen bee of Manhattan's Upper East Side" and the girl with a wardrobe that's to die for. Other nights I dream of roaming the streets of Paris in search of my true love, or becoming a world-renowned doctor that discovered the cure for cancer. Some nights I dream realistically - I dream of my future, my family, my friends. When I get lost in a dream like that, I wake up with hope that it will become reality.
In my dreams, there's nothing for me to fear or worry about. I can dream of the impossible, the attainable, and everything in between. But once the sun rises and the light flickers through the curtains onto my face, I am no longer lost.
This is my first draft, so can someone please leave me some helpful feedback/comments about my essay? This is my last one and I'm done. Help is greatly appreciated! :)
*****
I know of a place that only I can enter. It is best accessed when I'm in the comfort of my own bed, resting between the sheets. As I close my eyes, within a matter of minutes or perhaps hours, my mind creates a world shaped by my thoughts and aspirations. During the late hours of the night, up until sunrise, I am lost in my own dreams.
One night, usually Monday nights after watching Gossip Girl, I may live the life of Blair Waldorf, "the queen bee of Manhattan's Upper East Side" and the girl with a wardrobe that's to die for. Other nights I dream of roaming the streets of Paris in search of my true love, or becoming a world-renowned doctor that discovered the cure for cancer. Some nights I dream realistically - I dream of my future, my family, my friends. When I get lost in a dream like that, I wake up with hope that it will become reality.
In my dreams, there's nothing for me to fear or worry about. I can dream of the impossible, the attainable, and everything in between. But once the sun rises and the light flickers through the curtains onto my face, I am no longer lost.
