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Feb 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay [8]
Moving into the Land of Dream
It was Saturday a family day. I wake up by the morning light with the thick coffee aroma filling into the room. I wake up with a yawn but still laying down because of my laziness. I can feel the tender sun wrapping me around giving me warmth. I then stood up nearly tumbling from the lost of balance and went down the stairs. There I saw my husband drinking coffee, and reading the newspaper at the same time. My Son Christian was as usual watching T.V while eating his cookie. I on the other hand went outside to get some fresh air. [...]
Moving into the Land of Dream
It was Saturday a family day. I wake up by the morning light with the thick coffee aroma filling into the room. I wake up with a yawn but still laying down because of my laziness. I can feel the tender sun wrapping me around giving me warmth. I then stood up nearly tumbling from the lost of balance and went down the stairs. There I saw my husband drinking coffee, and reading the newspaper at the same time. My Son Christian was as usual watching T.V while eating his cookie. I on the other hand went outside to get some fresh air. [...]