Scholarship / "to achieve the knowledge and ambition in my chosen field" Why I should be considered [2]

Hey guys! this is my first post and I need help with a scholarship essay its supposed to be under 200 words. The question is "Why do I need this Scholarship"

I have been given the wonderful opportunity to attend college as the first person in my family. For me this is one of the best achievements I am able to make happen in my life. My main reason to attend college is to pursue my higher education. By continuing I will break into my intended career path to achieve the knowledge and ambition in my chosen field, to give back to the community, and to see a change for the better interest of others and myself. I see this opportunity as a way to achieve my dreams, engage in new experiences and gain a deeper sense of who I am. With the help of this scholarship will I be able to achieve my goals and feed my desire for knowledge to develop me for the future. Although for me I can wish but in order for this to happen I need to take action, there have been many financial setbacks in my family and I would like to participate in contributing to my education in any way, form or shape and this opportunity for aid is something I must do to fulfill my dreams.

Undergraduate / UNITED AIRLINES EMPLOYEES DEPENDENTS on educational and career goals & objectives [2]

QUESTION: Explain to us your educational and career goals, and objectives.

Does this meet the requirments so far? it has to be under 200 words and I believe this is 15 over. I know it needs some serious editing and grammer but any help. My brain is so fried from working on scholarships :(

Our bodies are the perfect science, each working in sync towards a common goal in supreme performance. I have been driven further the growth of my goals on being a sports psychologist. By pursuing this will be involving myself to explore different fields of experience, enabling me to assist others to communicate and engage in activities. I want to learn how to help these athletes understand how to be aware and in control of their body and mind, to obtain a peak performance. My mission is trying to understand the human kinetics and the psychological factors that affect performance in sports, and physical exercise, to me this is absolutely fascinating and drives my eagerness to study and research the psychological effects on the body. From this I plan to seek a position at Nike's because of their values, and not just their desire, but also mine as well to increase motivation and performance from these athletes. Nike fosters the growth of the individual to explore their potential and push each one of us athletes or not to our boundaries to succeed. I want to be able to research and grow under top professionals so I too can go back into my community and offer support and opportunity for those who are in need of assistance.