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PROL1F1C   
Jan 8, 2007
Graduate / Applying for a fellowship... [7]

Ok I'm applying for a fellowship and since its been nearly ten years since I've been in school ALL of my work sounds elementary. I wrote my personal statement and now I'm stuck trying to write my Career Goals. I want to owner and operate a Community Development Center that provides underserved communities with opportunities. The center will focus on empowering resident to revitalize urban communities, build community wealth, seek home ownership, develop job skills, provide a safe haven for youth, and explore educational options. (yes that's from my goals statement). I'm not sure if my essays are fellowship worthy. Please HELP!!
PROL1F1C   
Jan 9, 2007
Graduate / Applying for a fellowship... [7]

Well start here with the autobiographical statement and I'll work on the career goals and post by tomorrow. Any feedback is helpful. Thanks in advance.

When I was a child, I had dreams of being beautiful. In my young mind beautiful was reserved for the Olympic gymnast and figure skaters. I spent hours recreating their dance routines and dreamed of winning a gold medal. For my birthday, I only wanted to see the figure skaters at the local arena. I was destined to be beautiful.

My parents supported me in every endeavor. My father, an only child from an affluent family, greatest joy was bragging about my brother and me. My mother, on the other hand, is from a small town in Georgia with limited resources, a large family, and illiterate parents. Her only hopes were to provide us with opportunities greater than Georgia could afford.

Although my parents had to forgo higher education, they were able to achieve many accomplishments and provided my brother and me with far more opportunities then they received. It came to no surprise that my family was ecstatic in my interest in being "beautiful". They smiled with delight when I pranced around the living room for my weekly show of acrobats and angelic moves.

I received my first opportunity to join a gymnastics' team in the fourth grade. My competition had formal training and years of experiences in the sport. My parents were unaware of what it actually took to become a gymnast and I was without the guidance and exposure to the formalities of the sport. I was devastated and I throw thought of being beautiful away.

By the time I reached high school, I was accustomed to being involved in clubs. I was a member of Students Against Drunk Driving, yearbook committee, Pep Club, and studied Japanese at Yale University's Enrichment Series. In addition, I dedicated my time in the two clubs that helped chart the next decade of my life: Cooperative Work Study and the Black Hispanic Student Union (BHSU). Within those two clubs, I discovered a world I never known.

In Cooperative Work Study, I learned about untraditional jobs for women and became mesmerized with thoughts of becoming an International Marketing Executive. In fact, the reason for studying Japanese was to acquire a "competitive edge", another learned lesson at Cooperative Work Study. I also learned the importance of volunteering, work ethics, politics, and obtained my first real job.

As a member of BHSU, I learned cultural pride, community responsibility, and an opportunity to visit Historically Black Colleges and Universities (HBCU). Every spring we would travel to colleges and viewed minorities that had numerous professional and social interests. From my first visit, I discovered a world that would embrace me, challenge me, and highlight minority accomplishments often overshadowed. Learning at an HBCU became my deepest desire and my dream school was Hampton University.

The advisors for Cooperative Work Study and BHSU were adamant about supporting me and acknowledging my accomplishments. They helped me redefine my meaning of beautiful. Beautiful now represented self-worth, pride, confidence, and accomplishment. I was armed with being beautiful the first day of college. The second day of college was quite the contrary. My parents filed for divorce and my life completely changed. My father moved away and financially neglected the family. For two years, I worked, sent money home to pay bills, and slowly slipped into a place of financial hardship, depression, and eventually academic dismissal. However, I still had an undying desire to finish at my dream school. I refused to come that far and lose the title of a first generation college graduate. I was motivated with the responsibility of inspiring my younger relatives to follow my example. I sought support from the academic probation counselors and the first generation support group. I went from dismissed to a corporate sponsored School of Business student and proudly graduating on time.

I was beginning my professional career and had a goal of becoming an International Marketing Executive. I joined the management trainee program at a car rental company and quickly promoted to Corporate Leads Captain. I ranked in the top twenty-five percentile in performance and received awards for my work ethics. I was trusted with more responsibility then the other trainees and frequently given bonuses. I hated that job. I found refuge in volunteering in the inner city. Once again, I felt beautiful educating and empowering youth. I fell in love with the possibilities of inspiring underserved communities.

Later, I stumbled into a position at a community center as Director of Children and Teen Services until the center closed. Afterward, Girl Scouts contacted me about a unique statewide program that was in need of a coordinator. Girl Scouts Beyond Bars was a program for the daughters of incarcerated mothers. Bi-weekly, I would transport members to the state prison and hold a traditional Girl Scouts meeting. The program quickly became bigger then my job description. I helped the mothers prepare for release and offered job-interviewing techniques. I helped the daughters with relationship issues and peer pressure. I knew then that my purpose in life is community development. I completed a Master's Certificate in Organizational Leadership to fine-tune my skills.

Presently, I am a Resource Coordinator responsible for matching children in foster care with families and community resources. Within the last five years, I have devoted myself as a crewmember at Church on the Rock (second level membership out of 3 levels), teen club advisor, managing the empowerment program I founded, chairing the African Descendant Heritage committee, and volunteering at local women shelters. In addition, I also organized tsunami relief efforts and the neighborhood National Cancer Coalition drive. I hold an Executive Board position in a business and professional women's club and alumni association. As a proud military wife with a husband Iraqi war bound, I strive to guide and expose underserved communities with the formalities of being successful. I strive to provide underserved communities with guidance to define their version of being beautiful.

written by s. moncrief
PROL1F1C   
Jan 10, 2007
Graduate / Applying for a fellowship... [7]

Thank you I've made the changes to the autobiographical statement and it does read better. Below is the career goals statement. Is it too much story telling? The question asked What experiences have influenced this career direction? What attracts you to a career in public administration? What are my 5-10 year career goals? so I'm not sure if below is a good concept of what they want. Anyway please critique...

When I returned home after graduating from college in 1999, I was disappointed. Community centers were closing; violence and teen pregnancy increased, and a noticeable cycle of generational poverty were present. Equipped with a Marketing Degree and my ability to network I began my journey to save my community. I founded a girls' empowerment program called Heart's Desire Society, Inc. The program focuses on leadership, education, and self -esteem. It also has a networking and support group for the members' parents.

My effort to develop my community continues in varies endeavors. I volunteer at local women shelters, and organize tsunami relief efforts. I also coordinate the neighborhood donation drive for the National Cancer Coalition. In addition, I participate in the Walk for hunger and encourage others to donate generously to the cause. Internationally, I coordinate medical and school supplies drives. In 2005, I had the opportunity to deliver the donated items to Togo, West Africa. While there, I help renovate a local school and donated scholarships for fifty girls. I also help supply a village hospital with beds and the village graciously named the hospital room after the five of us involved.

I recently received a Master's Certificate in Organizational Leadership. However, I feel that guidance from respected executives and intricate public service information is imperative in becoming knowledgeable about urban affairs. Within your program I seek to gain the guidance and education needed to obtain my career goals.

My career goals focus on providing opportunities for people in underserved communities through creation of a Community Development Center. The center will focus on empowering residents to revitalize their community, build community wealth, seek home ownership, and develop job skills. The center will also provide a safe haven for youth and allow them to explore educational options.

Above all, a Master of Public Administration will help me strengthen both the non-profit management knowledge and the entrepreneurial skills necessary to create a center. By developing and maximizing the knowledge and managerial skills I have already accumulated, the XXX program will allow me ultimately to make a concrete and substantial contribution to the urban community.

written by s. moncrief
PROL1F1C   
Jun 11, 2007
Graduate / Memo style answer about Alberto Gonzales for graduate school [2]

Please read and critique. This is a memo style answer about Alberto Gonzales. I just started graduate school (thanks to you guys critiquing my intro essay) and I'm rusty writing... please respond.

At the commencement of Alberto Gonzales career in politics, he worked as the General Counsel to then-Texas Governor George W. Bush. As a General Counsel, he was responsible for providing legal advice to the Governor. Gonzales was "entrusted to offer legal opinions on extremely wide variety of matters." (Page 115) Specific matters include: "whether Indian Tribes in Texas could open up casinos; and whether convicts might be eligible for some form of death-row reprieve..." (Page 115)

According to the "Duties of the General Counsel" as described on the Texas Archival Online, while George W. Bush was in office and Alberto Gonzales was serving in that capacity, his role with regards to the death penalty included: tracking inmates on death row as their cases move through the judicial process including all appeals to the governor for commutations or stays of execution and handling pardon requests sent to the governor. In particular, his job in this function was to "personally advise the governor on who should be put to death in Texas." (Page 125) He would review clemency petitions, prepare his own clemency memo for the fifty-seven possible executions pending in Texas at that time. (Page 125)

On the day of a prisoner's execution, Gonzales role was to be in constant communication with the prison's warden to receive a "play by play" execution order. Once the prisoner had expired, Gonzales would notify the governor. (Page 124)

2. Alberto Gonzales was appointed to Secretary of State by then-Governor Bush. Although the position is an elected office in many states it is appointed in Texas. As Texas' Secretary of State, Gonzales was responsible for "beefing up the number of registered voters...especially Hispanic voters...(Page 149) "His primary job was to be Bush's chief advisor on relations with Mexico and border affairs..." (Page 155) In contrast of his latter private job as General Counsel, the Secretary of State position was very public. He started making speeches, cutting ribbons, and shaking hands, and serving as Texas ambassador to Mexico. (Page 155) As described in Gonzales biography on the White House's website, additional duties included being the chief elections officer.

3. According to Mr. Gonzales perspective, his primary role (and the office's role) as the White House's first Hispanic Counsel was to attract quality assistants. Recruiting staffers from varies venues; he sought after "neoconservative" people that had "beliefs that are fairly consistent with the president's." (page 196)

Mr. Gonzales intent was to work closely with Attorney General John Ashcroft and the Justice Department's Office of Legal Counsel, the other body that provided the president with legal advice. (Page 195) However, he stated the he "will be the person in the White House every day. [He] will be at [the president's] side... and the attorney general is in another building, running another agency." (Page 196)

Gonzales objective was to mimic their relations in Texas whereas he was beside the president providing legal advice, being "the president's lawyer... and to make sure [they] didn't make the same mistake made by previous administrations." He was accountable for the entire legal ramification that the president would face if he wasn't properly advised on legal matters.

4. The system of accountability that I think Mr. Gonzales tends to emphasize the most throughout his career in government is professional. Although Alan Berlow stated in his Washington Post article on November 21, 2004 that "President Bush has selected a man with a long record of giving him the kind of legal advice he wants... [yet the] advice has not always been of the highest professional or ethical caliber" I disagree. Many that oppose Gonzales viewed him as a "yes man" or willing to do anything he is told. After reading this book it is my opinion that he simple did his job without distractions.

It was stated that one of the reason Bush liked Gonzales was because he was very concise and to the point and at the end made a recommendation. (Page 116) His job function was to advise the governor or president about the legal consequences and allowed Bush to make a decision. The recommendation was outside of his scope as a general counselor. Others Bush staffers would offer background information and legal ramification without an actual recommendation leaving that to the governor's discretion; in retrospect, utilizing the hierarchical accountability model. In my opinion, Gonzales felt it was his professional responsibility to provide the best advice and recommendation from a legal perspective.

In contract to the many media outlets that label him as a "yes man" or view him as someone leaning on a subornation hierarchical accountability model; I strongly felt that he never strayed from the professional style. The people that worked closely with him during his career often commented on the way he handled situation. People such as Karen Greene, whom Gonzales had hired after coming to Austin, stated there were plenty of fires, but he never blinked. (Page 126) While another lawyer from Houston stated "you won't see him straying off course." I translate this to mean whatever the task was it was done without complaint or loss of professionalism. He relied on his work experience and ethics to guide him in his career and to keep his professional relationships "all business."

5. I enjoyed the book about Alberto Gonzales' Rise to Power. I found his story to be inspirational to the many minorities that shared his low socioeconomic upbringing. Prior to reading this book I knew very little about Gonzales background, professional growth, and sacrifices that he encounter. His success as a partner in V&E as well in politics provides hope for those that have similar obstacles.

Although the majority of the book provided third party account of who Gonzales is, what he thinks, and how he response to different situation; I felt it was a good indication of how he is as person. In my opinion, the best portrayal of a good person is when people refer to and/or describe you in good measures when you are not around. The people that are close to him only offered positive insight into his world. Those that are outside of his inner circle provided negative account and anecdotal interpretation that isn't valid since it relies on second hand testimony not personal knowledge.

I did feel that he should have provided community development in his hometown and diversified his office culture instead of conforming to the "norms" (i.e. stop speaking Spanish, shaving off his mustache because he looked "too Hispanic", and never discussing his upbringing). Nonetheless, his story should be celebrated as a success and proof that regardless of classism and barriers hard work and consistency will reap rewards.
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