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roxina

Feb 23, 2011

Writing Feedback / teacher should not talk about their own political view , agree or disagree. [3]

Nowadays, teachers play an crucial role in teaching and fulfilling students'lives in schools . In fact ,they can change the future of our current societ by teaching students how to be a better citizens to their communities .Although teachers have right to teach our children in school and spend almost most of their time with their students , it dose not means that they can manipulate their students' minds by their own points of views towrds the social and political issues .This is because teachers are human beings and they can have wrong ideas and have biased view that lead to distract students and waste their precoius time in schools.

It is obviouse that teachers are part of the human being society who can commite same mistakes as all other people , this means, teachers should not impose their own ideas to their students . It can lead them to a wrong perception about their society and it might even make them brainwashed because of the fact that students have trust in their teachers .

The other reason that teacher should not inject their own belives to the students is that teachers' point of view might be biased and unfair . Let's assume that a teacher political views is that all of the congress man and politician of their society are corrupted thieves who dose not do anything besides ripping people off . if this teacher impose his/her biased view to students , it will impact their believes for a long period of time .It can leave them with anger and hatred towrds politcians .

Finally the most important reason that teachers should not expose students with their own personal ideas is that , It can waste students' valuable time and energy during their classess .In addition , it can leave them distracted and confused .Therefore ,it can even put a negative impact on their academic performances . teachers duties are improving students learning ability and preparing them to succees in their future careers.

Taking in to account all of these reasons,we can reach the conclusion that it will be better off for teachers and students to keep their own believes perssonal and do not talk about them insides the classroom otherwise students will suffer the bad consequenses resulted from getting exposed to the wrong direction by a biased point of view which can leading to wasting their time for studying and achieving their academic goales .

please let me know about all the grammer and puctuations problem. thanks

roxina

Feb 24, 2011

Writing Feedback / Every generation of people is different in important ways. How about your generation? [7]

[quote=joseph240]Every generation of people[/b] different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

people from the past ages do not possess the same approaches to consider which traditions are appropriate and which one is inappropriate . In addition to this the social trends and values that old generation were familiar with have changed tremendousely through the past decates. The cultural reform has provided the modern generation with totally different way of eating, living and clothing.

In the first place , we tend to have a meal with spoon and chopstick, not with hands like our parents 'generation.
In the past, people used to eat with their hands even in a big gatherings and they do not care for forieigners and tourists from other countries . The modern generations ; however, got fammiliar with table manners brought from western cultures which influenced eating habits dramatically . In another words, people had to inevitably adapt their eating habit from eating by hands to eating by spoon and chopstick .As a result , foreigners wont judge new generations as an uncivile people.

In the second place , my generations are more likely to go out to get exposed to ( meet) new people rather than getting together only with our relatives.

People of older generations did not have tendecy to interact and socialize with strangers .In Today' modern society , due to the influence of western cultures that encourage people to be outgoing and enjoy social interaction, people modified their past generations' traditional life style so that they can fit propely in modern age and current social trends . For example, every day I have to go to the main city for my career and be inevitably accustomed to encountering many new people.

Finally , my generation prefer to wear a formal garment rather than put on half-naked clothes.
In the past , before the western colonization, man always wears only a short pant with naked- body and woman gets on clothes with bare shoulders. Due to the cultural alternation, it is impolite and unsuitable for people to wear traditional clothes and so they tend to choose an appropriate out fits for themselves to look civil infront of tourists from other countries .

To sum it up, although people are liable to get accustomed to their original culture, they cannot resist the current modern globalization trend that spreads across the world. As a result, new generation of my country has changed their life styles radically .

I made alot of changes , feel free to correct me .
you did great job , just do not use word " thing or things ". do not repeat the word "trend" that much .