JCA
Aug 11, 2011
Letters / "the Norwich office positions" - possible job inquiry [4]
Hi guys,
As you can see this is my first post on the EssayForum. I am here because i want to learn how to write clear and structured sentences, paragraphs and just to improve my writing in general. Over the past 6 months I have been trying to take in certain things that might help improve my approach and, to help structure everything. I think the only way i will truly learn is to be critiqued by people who know what they are on about. So, I thank you in advance, and please dont hold back on criticising/point me in the right direction; i want to learn.
This is a recent email i sent for a possible job position earlier today:
"Dear Karen,
I hope you are well.
My team leader initiated that I should write in respect of any possible part-time positions that may be available within the Norwich office. I am looking for one or two days per week, including any Saturday vacancies, along side my final year of university. I am currently on the Savills Summer Scheme within the Lansdowne House office in London. I originally started within the Planning & Development department on the 1st of June, however, since then, I have gained an extension for the month of July, and most recently, for August and September within the London Residential and Development Department.
I am currently studying Real Estate Management at the Anglia Ruskin University. I enjoy all aspects of the course, and ideally, I would like to gain as much experience, within Savills, before I graduate next summer. My timetable for lessons and lectures for the next academic year is for Monday's and Friday's. So, I would be available for any other days of the week, including Saturdays. I will be commuting from my home in Sheringham, so getting to and from the office wouldn't be any problems. I am very open to anything that might be on offer within your office.
I have attached my CV for your convenience. If you require any additional information, please let me know.
I hope to hear from you soon.
Kind regards
James Carter Adams"
Please comment. Many thanks.
Hi guys,
As you can see this is my first post on the EssayForum. I am here because i want to learn how to write clear and structured sentences, paragraphs and just to improve my writing in general. Over the past 6 months I have been trying to take in certain things that might help improve my approach and, to help structure everything. I think the only way i will truly learn is to be critiqued by people who know what they are on about. So, I thank you in advance, and please dont hold back on criticising/point me in the right direction; i want to learn.
This is a recent email i sent for a possible job position earlier today:
"Dear Karen,
I hope you are well.
My team leader initiated that I should write in respect of any possible part-time positions that may be available within the Norwich office. I am looking for one or two days per week, including any Saturday vacancies, along side my final year of university. I am currently on the Savills Summer Scheme within the Lansdowne House office in London. I originally started within the Planning & Development department on the 1st of June, however, since then, I have gained an extension for the month of July, and most recently, for August and September within the London Residential and Development Department.
I am currently studying Real Estate Management at the Anglia Ruskin University. I enjoy all aspects of the course, and ideally, I would like to gain as much experience, within Savills, before I graduate next summer. My timetable for lessons and lectures for the next academic year is for Monday's and Friday's. So, I would be available for any other days of the week, including Saturdays. I will be commuting from my home in Sheringham, so getting to and from the office wouldn't be any problems. I am very open to anything that might be on offer within your office.
I have attached my CV for your convenience. If you require any additional information, please let me know.
I hope to hear from you soon.
Kind regards
James Carter Adams"
Please comment. Many thanks.