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Daisy Sircar

Jul 22, 2011

Writing Feedback / Of all the mentioned five countries, Turkey had the highest spending in food, drinks and tobacco [8]

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002.

My essay starts below--

The table illustrates the percentage of expenditure of nationals from five different countries on three categories of items in 2002. The categories include Food/Drinks/Tobacco, Clothing/Footwear and Leisure/Education.

Of all the countries, Turkey had the highest spending in food, drinks and tobacco, which was almost one third of the total consumer expenditure. Ireland followed a close second at 28.91% with Sweden ... [...]

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Daisy Sircar

Jul 22, 2011

Writing Feedback / Of all the mentioned five countries, Turkey had the highest spending in food, drinks and tobacco [8]

Thank You Ajit for your valuable feedback. I will definitely consider your suggestions. I am writing my Task 2 essay below for your review. Please read. Also can you please rate me on an IELTS scale, so that I know where I stand.

Task 2--
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion?

Write at least 250 words.

My essay-
Nature versus nurture has been a topic of constant debate and discussion. Some believe that natural talent is important to excel in music, arts or sports. Others think that training is of utmost importance in honing the skills of individuals.

Natural skills can make a person perform well in a particular area without much effort. A person born with a certain talent will definitely have an edge over others devoid of it. He/she can easily supersede others in those fields. On the other hand, in today's world, trainings in music, arts or sports are readily available. And with methodical training and thorough practice, people can become good in a certain domain. However, to outshine others, talent is required. Talent gives an artist that added advantage that no training can provide.

Therefore, in my opinion, talent and training are not mutually exclusive. Adequate trainings help to sharpen an individual's talent whereas; inborn talent produces the optimum results out of all trainings. A diamond fresh out of the mine is crude and not considered a jewel, but after considerable cutting and polishing, it becomes one of the most expensive things desired by man. Similarly, an individual born with a particular skill has to be groomed, for the world to recognize his worth.

All the great musicians, sports stars and other artists of today and past have been able to create history only because they had a combination of both innate talent and extensive training. Only talent or only training can make a person good in a field, but not great.

In conclusion, I believe, a person can be taught to be good in music, arts or sports, but to rise above others, some talent is required.