jonsie5
Aug 17, 2011
Undergraduate / "decision to enlist in the military" - UT Austin Transfer -SOP [4]
Hi!! This is my Statement of Purpose. It should round off about a page. SOP should be used as an opportunity to speak directly to Admissions and explain any descrepancies or address subjects that are not expressed on the application. Any criticism with this would help.Too long? Too Short? Not personal? Too Personal? Grammar? Etc.
Thank you.
My decision to enlist in the military has changed my life in ways that cannot be matched. I am one of the fortunate few who belong to an organization that instills the most honorable values in its personnel and develops them into a cadre to be used at their fullest potential. At first, it was difficult to find my niche and I made many mistakes. Recovering from those choices took a lot more strength than I knew I possessed at the time. Now I have armed myself with the right tools to progress and actualize my aspirations. I have broadened my experience by participating in an array of team and community activities and used my tenacity to accomplish personal and shared goals. While I have exceeded the expectations of those around me, I know that I am capable of achieving much more. That is why I have decided to further my development by continuing my education in order to earn a commission in the United States Air Force.
My goal as a commissioned officer in the Air Force is to be an agent of change, whether on a small or large scale, so long as the change is positive and for the good of many. In Airman Culture, we learn that leadership requires passion an inspiration. The same goes for learning foreign languages and exploring other cultures. Another thing we accept is that our world is ever evolving, and because of this, we are constantly learning. In my everyday use of Arabic, as a Cryptologic Linguist, I find more that I don't know about my own first language. I am successful in my profession because my passion is language, so I have been inspired to pursue an undergraduate degree in English. Unfortunately, my year as a part-time student at the University of Maryland University College does not reflect my determination to succeed. Instead, it shows a period when I struggled to find a balance between my academic and professional lives. However, I am prepared to dedicate 100% of my energy and attention to excelling in each course while studying full time at the University of Texas at Austin.
It would be a privilege to immerse myself in the diversity of cultures, both in the capitol city of my home state and on the university campus. The opportunities afforded to the students of one of the top ranking English departments in the country allow for incredible growth. I hope to enhance my learning experience with courses in Linguistics and ASL, and I am eager to build lifelong relationships with new peers and mentors. Certainly, completing a BA in English will be the first of many daunting steps on my way to earning teaching certificates and an MFA in Creative Writing, but it will be the most exciting of them all.
Hi!! This is my Statement of Purpose. It should round off about a page. SOP should be used as an opportunity to speak directly to Admissions and explain any descrepancies or address subjects that are not expressed on the application. Any criticism with this would help.Too long? Too Short? Not personal? Too Personal? Grammar? Etc.
Thank you.
My decision to enlist in the military has changed my life in ways that cannot be matched. I am one of the fortunate few who belong to an organization that instills the most honorable values in its personnel and develops them into a cadre to be used at their fullest potential. At first, it was difficult to find my niche and I made many mistakes. Recovering from those choices took a lot more strength than I knew I possessed at the time. Now I have armed myself with the right tools to progress and actualize my aspirations. I have broadened my experience by participating in an array of team and community activities and used my tenacity to accomplish personal and shared goals. While I have exceeded the expectations of those around me, I know that I am capable of achieving much more. That is why I have decided to further my development by continuing my education in order to earn a commission in the United States Air Force.
My goal as a commissioned officer in the Air Force is to be an agent of change, whether on a small or large scale, so long as the change is positive and for the good of many. In Airman Culture, we learn that leadership requires passion an inspiration. The same goes for learning foreign languages and exploring other cultures. Another thing we accept is that our world is ever evolving, and because of this, we are constantly learning. In my everyday use of Arabic, as a Cryptologic Linguist, I find more that I don't know about my own first language. I am successful in my profession because my passion is language, so I have been inspired to pursue an undergraduate degree in English. Unfortunately, my year as a part-time student at the University of Maryland University College does not reflect my determination to succeed. Instead, it shows a period when I struggled to find a balance between my academic and professional lives. However, I am prepared to dedicate 100% of my energy and attention to excelling in each course while studying full time at the University of Texas at Austin.
It would be a privilege to immerse myself in the diversity of cultures, both in the capitol city of my home state and on the university campus. The opportunities afforded to the students of one of the top ranking English departments in the country allow for incredible growth. I hope to enhance my learning experience with courses in Linguistics and ASL, and I am eager to build lifelong relationships with new peers and mentors. Certainly, completing a BA in English will be the first of many daunting steps on my way to earning teaching certificates and an MFA in Creative Writing, but it will be the most exciting of them all.