Writing Feedback / 'a time when a friend defended you in difficult circumstances' - narrative essay [3]

Write about a time when a friend defended you in difficult circumstances
(i have my Cambridge paper's and need ideas on how i can make my essays better)

Haroon and i were best friends long since we met in grade 5.He was the only friend i had when i moved to England with my family.we had studied in the same school and college but our path diverged as we grew up and both followed our own ambitions.At an early age,Haroon was able to become a successful lawyer in west London while i was only able to get a job in east London as a car salesman.though we were far apart,we would never miss an opportunity to meet each other and as my financial capabilities were not as strong as his so he was always there to help me.

His most important attribute was that he trusted me with his life and that's was the main reason that we became friends but no one knew that his trust would later help me.It all started when i was returning from work after a night shift.the neighborhood i had to pass through was a troublesome one known for its robberies and muggings.i had just stopped at a nearby mart to buy some food items when i saw a black man beating up a teenager.As an good Samaritan i went to help the teenager and knocked out the man.thanking me,the teenager ran away.

I called the police and after investigation the black man the police man came to me and said:
"sir,place your hands on the car"
"but what did i do!"i protested
"you have been accompanying an armed robbery and assaulting a civilian'
i was confused and shocked on what was going on and suddenly i realized that i had actually saved the robber!the black man was the owner of the shop and was beating the robber.I tried to explain to the police what the misconception was but no one was ready to listen.I contacted haroon as soon as i could and he came to my rescue.he bailed me out of jail and then i explained to him what had happened and the misconception that had taken place .He believed me and as i couldn't afford a lawyer he insisted me on keeping him.

I had to appear in front of a court and explain my actions.The police had caught the thief who was involved and he blamed me on being the mastermind of the plot even though i had no idea who he was!The video of the fight going outside the mart was shown which made me look as the criminal .Haroon believed me and argued that the tape of inside the mart shall also be seen to prove that i was innocent.Though the judge had made his decision he ordered the tape to be shown and it seemed obvious that i had helped the robber unintentionally.The judge saw this as a case of misconception and apologized for the problems caused.Overjoyed,Haroon and me congratulated each other.

Haroon showed how good a friend he was by supporting and defending me at a time when no one else was there for me.He possesed the qualities of a great friends and seeing such a strong bond of friendship had brought tears in my eyes.This perfectly matches the saying "A friend in need is a friend indeed'

Writing Feedback / o levels: narrative a story in which an interview is important [2]

This is my second go at a narrative essay so could you tell me how i could improve it.
write a story in which an interview is important

IT had been a week since I had graduated from my university and was finally able to do my master's in business administration. I had been studying for several years to achieve this goal and though my parent's couldn't afford such expensive education ,they had worked tirelessly so that I could go to one of the best institutions. I was devoted to pay back my parent's for all their blood and sweat.

Now my aim was to find a job in which I could support both myself and my parent's with ease and this was not an easy task. I downloaded multiple job application form's but none of them was ready to pay me the amount I had demanded. Tired and fed up, the thought of leaving town and going to some other city would be the best choice. Just as I was glancing out my window and thinking of an answer I saw something that made me smile wide open.

Out the window, I saw the newly constructed building of Richard Inc., a very popular and devoted company which was well known for its caring attitude towards its employees. I quickly went online to find if they where hiring and it may have been my lucky day as they were! I quickly filled out the application forms and sent them right away. I received an email from them in which they wanted to take an interview of me first. I was really excited though the interview thing was kind of a nerve wrecker but I knew that I had to get this job to start a better life

The next few days I'd spend time practicing and trying to become more confident .I would often call my friends so that they could judge me and it seemed like a great idea as if boosted my morale. The week went by quickly and before we knew it Monday had arrived.

Even though I was well prepared for this moment my heart began to pound out as I entered the building. Bad thoughts and feeling began to arise but I tried to keep myself calm.my stomach started growling even though I had a heavy breakfast and my hands began shaky. I knew I had worked hard or this and I was not ready to let my nerves get the best of me so I took a deep breathe and entered the office of the CEO.

I greeted him and sat down in front of him. He seemed like a man who meant business but when he started talking to me in a polite manner I could see that he was a really nice guy.this helped in rebuilding my confidence and I became more frank with the guy.

"so why do you want this job Harris?"he asked while he poured he a cup of tea.
"well my family had always worked hard for me and they had poured all there money for me so that I could get the best education. Now i think it's my turn to help them". I explained

he told me that he liked my enthusiasm and style and was really impressed by my devotion to my parents. I was told that I would be informed later if I had gotten the job.

The next week I only thought about one thing, was my future secured or not? This thought kept gliding in my mind and after a week went by without a response I doubted that I would be hired but on morning I received a letter from the firm in which they said that it would be an honour if I joined them. I was over joyed and called my parents, telling them the good new's.they felt excited for me and now I knew that I was meant to do this, this job was made for me. I knew that this was all due to my parents and gave them a nice hug when I met them.

i would be looking forward for your help guys and please tell me asap