Writing Feedback / 'education is the backbone of success' - personal essay [2]

What is the question you are responding to?
I feel that the premise is maybe a bit too pedestrian - could you write on something more unique?
Hope this was helpful :)

Undergraduate / Intellectional development / Roommate / What matters to me [2]

I'm not so sure on the roommate essay, though the first one is great.
I like the last one too - I was considering writing something similar!