jgb
Nov 3, 2011
Undergraduate / "An identity sculpted by language" - Harvard Supplement [5]
This is a fabulous essay. One suggestion would be to reconsider the Eve/apple analogy. It came out of nowhere for me. Also consider dropping the word "lastly" in the final paragraph. The second to last paragraph is amazing. It's hard for the final paragraph to live up to that! Good luck!
This is a fabulous essay. One suggestion would be to reconsider the Eve/apple analogy. It came out of nowhere for me. Also consider dropping the word "lastly" in the final paragraph. The second to last paragraph is amazing. It's hard for the final paragraph to live up to that! Good luck!