Undergraduate / 'how I feel about people and diversity' - Personal Statement- State University of NY [3]

Prompt- how would your academic interest, personal perspectives, and life experiences add to the diversity of a college campus?

My outlook on life and how far I will go in life, can be determined by how I feel about people and diversity, which all came form where I grew up. As a child growing up in New York, the city that never sleeps, people always seem to do questionable things to each other for their own personal gain. I always wanted to know how can people do what ever it takes to achieve something even if it means hurting others. Going to a school with all minority, I never used to see my school as diverse or a good learning place. After being in my A.P literature class I saw diversity as variety of people with different religions, world views and even characteristics. I got to learn new things from classmates from India, China, Caribbean islands and even African. Even though, my school is known for its lack of certain facilities and students with families lacking of funds, some students still try to succeed to better their lives, making me feel inspired and realizing my goals of being a psychologist even more. I've realize I want to learn about the mind of people from all over and possible help them better themselves no matter where they are from or how they look.

How I achieve my goals, all depends on which college I start my journey at. I know there are many other colleges I can choose to go to because my major is common in most colleges. However, I choose this college because personally, I feel it's a great match for me and for the person I want to become. With such knowledgeable professors from all over to learn from and a great social atmosphere with a variety people, I couldn't go wrong. I want to go to this school because I want more than just furthering my education, I want a social life that involves meeting many new people and making connections with them. Even though I can be considered a minority and there are numerous of students who feel they should go to this school because it is a great school to go for people of any region of the world to learn and network at. However, I think I would be a great candidate to choose for this school. With my believes of success and yearn to learn, I would try to succeed in your school academically and socially.

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Undergraduate / 'self-improvement and helping others' - What is your something?- Morgan [3]

According to Henry David Thoreau, 'One is not born into the world to do everything, but to do something.' What is your something?

Of course like any other occupation and hobby, helping other people isn't hard to do. Even a clown can help people by giving them a moment of happiness. I want to do more then just help people, I want to show them what they are capable of achieving in their everyday lives. Being a psychologist and being able to do that is my something I can contribute to the world. Even though, I am young and finding out new things about myself, I presume my something I am meant to do in this world, is assist people with their life issues and decisions.

Ever since my experience during my junior year in A.P English Literature, I seem to view the world in a different way then I did before. I was enlightened by the world view of existentialism. It was something new and different to me and my classmates. Many of which saw it as none sense and will do nothing for them outside the class, while I saw it as a new way to look at and pursue life. Seeing how people rejected the new way to think, made me wonder, why is it so easy to reject something new instead of just accept it as well,how can people do and say things for their own personal gain without the consideration for others. I became inspired me to become a psychologist to understand people better and even help them see what they can alter in the lives to make it better for themselves and others. This is what existentialism is all about making choices and take responsibility for the effects for yourself and others. what I want to do for myself and for others, as well.

Existentialism is a philosophy about finding oneself and the meaning of life through free will, personal choices and responsibilities, without the help of laws or traditions. Existentialism made me realize, I can control what I do and how I do it in life for myself but as well help others. Existentialist, Henry David Thoreau did live the way he felt was right for him and took responsibility for it. He aimed for self-improvement as well as help others in the process. Which is something I would like to do. However, the first step in achieving this, is coming to a college like Morgan State University that commensurate with my yearn to learn and help people.

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