According to Henry David Thoreau, 'One is not born into the world to do everything, but to do something.' What is your something?
Of course like any other occupation and hobby, helping other people isn't hard to do. Even a clown can help people by giving them a moment of happiness. I want to do more then just help people, I want to show them what they are capable of achieving in their everyday lives. Being a psychologist and being able to do that is my something I can contribute to the world. Even though, I am young and finding out new things about myself, I presume my something I am meant to do in this world, is assist people with their life issues and decisions.
Ever since my experience during my junior year in A.P English Literature, I seem to view the world in a different way then I did before. I was enlightened by the world view of existentialism. It was something new and different to me and my classmates. Many of which saw it as none sense and will do nothing for them outside the class, while I saw it as a new way to look at and pursue life. Seeing how people rejected the new way to think, made me wonder, why is it so easy to reject something new instead of just accept it as well,how can people do and say things for their own personal gain without the consideration for others. I became inspired me to become a psychologist to understand people better and even help them see what they can alter in the lives to make it better for themselves and others. This is what existentialism is all about making choices and take responsibility for the effects for yourself and others. what I want to do for myself and for others, as well.
Existentialism is a philosophy about finding oneself and the meaning of life through free will, personal choices and responsibilities, without the help of laws or traditions. Existentialism made me realize, I can control what I do and how I do it in life for myself but as well help others. Existentialist, Henry David Thoreau did live the way he felt was right for him and took responsibility for it. He aimed for self-improvement as well as help others in the process. Which is something I would like to do. However, the first step in achieving this, is coming to a college like Morgan State University that commensurate with my yearn to learn and help people.
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Of course like any other occupation and hobby, helping other people isn't hard to do. Lots of occupations and hobbies ARE hard to do, and so is helping people. I think that what you mean to say is that helping is not hard work for certain people, that it comes naturally to some. "of course" sounds a little strange as your opening words.
I want to show them what they are capable of achieving in their everyday lives. Yes! This is your main point, expand on this, it is an important statement.
Even though, I am young and finding out new things about myself, I presume my something I am meant to do in this world, is assist people with their life issues and decisions. This sentence is too long.
Ever since my experience during my junior year in A.P English Literature, I seem to view the world in a different way then I did before. Instead of "ever since" You could say "What I experienced during my junior year in A.P English Literature changed my view of the world.
You say "none sense" when you mean nonsense
However, the first step in achieving this, is coming to a college like Morgan State University that commensurate with my yearn to learn and help people. Use a different word than "yearn"
Remember to make the reader aware that you are a person with a plan, that you have long-term and short-term goals, and the college is exactly what will help you achieve those goals. You have a good essay here, it still need a little work with grammar but your content is excellent.
