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Joined: Dec 12, 2011
Last Post: Dec 28, 2011
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kikuchi   
Dec 16, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Not ashamed of my duties' - CommonApp - I am japanese [9]

Hello
I am japanese and I want the help of all of you
Please

The restrooms in my school are always kept clean. I always wondered about the mysterious elves behind our clean toilets. One day, I saw an elderly person who was cleaning restroom. I couldn't help but stared for a moment, trying to pretend not to see as he puts his hands in the dirty toilet bowl and started to wipe the entire stool without any hesitation.

I started to wonder and asked him whether he enjoys his job.He looked up at me and said "Young man, sometimes you must put your hands in unimaginable places to make a living. That is the life". One year as the vice leader of the school cleaning committee made me ponder about what the work truly means.

The work of cleaning Committee is dirty and tiring. The job description forces me to go to the dumpsite and separate all the garbage accordingly. Putting my hand into garbage bags every day made me questions about my close friends who throw away garbage without any consideration.I did not have any profit whose I felt lonely and depressed as no one truly understand how much effort we dedicate into keeping the school clean and did not understand why I did such a thing for. In beginning of the work in the dumpsites, I sensed a gap between other people and I started to dislike myself

Since I spoke that old man, I realize that it is not necessary to be ashamed of my duties. Work does not discrimination if we take pride in what we do. And if what our work makes a difference in our society. I am sure that I must do my best. It is the best way to make use of the experience to next work. It does not matter how another person thinks about me and my work. Nobody can't expect that how does work lead to oneself in the future so I have to trust that what I do the work now become "dots" like story of The late Steve Jobs once said you can't connect the dots looking forward; you can only connect them looking backwards. The scene whose that elderly man work taught me that. Gradually, I was able to find pride towards my work.

If you can't become to be the flower, you should become soil to make bloom. Nobody can't expect that how does work lead to oneself in the future so I have to trust that what I do the work now become "dots" like story of Steve jobs.

And, the restroom in my school is clean today. Maybe, that man work today. In the future, I should keep striving my work with a fresh sense of responsibility.
kikuchi   
Dec 24, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Not ashamed of my duties' - CommonApp - I am japanese [9]

Thank you for Chong's help
I see. I try improve intro

menukagrg
Thank you so much!!!!!!
your advice is the perfcet for me

Brian
Thank you
I check them and now am thinking about them!!!

NEW INTRO

The restrooms in my school are always kept clean. I always wondered about the mysterious elves behind our clean toilets. One day, when I entered the restroom, the strong smell of the detergent and fricative sound of brush took me, and then I saw an elderly person who stooped to clean the toilet. His clothes were terribly dirty in comparing with the clean restroom but oddly, his eyes were never to be somber. I couldn't help but stared for a moment, while trying to pretend not to see as he put his hands in the dirty toilet bowl and started to wipe the entire stool without any hesitation. I started to wonder and asked him whether he enjoyed his job. "What a dumb question?" I thought to myself. But, he smiled, looked up at me and said: "Young man, sometimes you must put your hands in unimaginable places to make a living. That's work". This is one of the unforgettable encounters I had when I was doing activities of our school's' cleaning committee. The one year, doing the activities as the vice president of the committee to which I was assigned, made me ponder what work truly means.
kikuchi   
Dec 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Do you enjoy running?' - common app short essay [6]

Hello
Thank you for your coming my page.
I really want you to review and advice my essay.

I have a question asked by many people. Do you enjoy running? Most people consider running as tiring and boring sport. However, it is comfortable above all to run for me. I put my hand on a starting line by the signal called "set", and then all my senses centralize in my ear. It stops at time and hears nothing. My heart becomes empty but at the moment when a pistol has begun to sound I start running step by step as if I satisfy the heart. Wind strongly blows my body, the world in front of me changes and I become a flash of wind. I forget to move my foot and go to the goal as if I fly. After having finished running, I said what is your question?
kikuchi   
Dec 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Do you enjoy running?' - common app short essay [6]

Thank you!!!
I am international student so glad to your help.

midoriさん
Thank you for youe help.
I rewrite it.Later,I will review your キットカット essay!

Lostboy
I really appreciate your comment.
I add the detail.
And,I will look your essay

new essay

I have a question asked by many people: Do you enjoy running? Most people consider running to be tiring and boring sport. "However, above all, I found the most comfort in running.

I belonged to the Track and Field club. The practice is hard but blowing clear wind separates me from realities of life. Because it is a challenge for me to run, running is the special for me. It is not matter what other think about Track and Field.

The signal is called. Set! I put my hand on the starting line and, suddenly, all of my senses centralize in my ear. Time seems to stop and silence takes over. My heart stops but the moment the pistol sounds I start running step by step as if I satisfy the heart. As wind strongly blows my body, the world in front of me changes and I become a flash of wind. I forget to move my foot. It almost seems as if I am flying to the goal. After having finished running, I reply: "What is your question?"
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