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atiekay   
Dec 29, 2011
Undergraduate / Common app short response, languages at job [7]

When I was offered a job at a local Japanese restaurant, I was thrilled. I had just returned from Japan and was excited to put my Japanese to use. Languages are my passion; I had grown up speaking English and German, learned Japanese as an exchange student and am now in my fourth year of taking Chinese. Through learning languages, I can relate to more people and gain insight into their cultures. Sushi Tei had an interesting assortment of customers and employees. Not only could I chat with the Japanese businessmen who came for lunch, I could listen in on conversations between my Chinese coworkers, learn the basics of Thai from a fellow waitress and pick up bits of Spanish while teaching ESL to the Mexican dishwasher. While waiting tables, I became proficient in the art of switching languages; taking orders in Japanese at one table, English at another and then making requests to the chef in Chinese. This job helped me become open-minded and appreciative of the diversity in my community.

I'm trying to think of a better concluding sentence. Thank you very much!
atiekay   
Dec 29, 2011
Undergraduate / Common app short response, languages at job [7]

Thank you, that's great advise! Right now I'm struggling to fit everything within 1000 characters but I'll try to incorporate that in somehow.

Thanks! I fixed that. :)
atiekay   
Dec 29, 2011
Undergraduate / WPI Supplement Open Response - How did you become interested in WPI? (650 characters) [6]

I really like it. You manage to pull off the humor and show your knowledge of the school. The transitions look fine to me, although the 'However' in the second sentence could be a little smoother. Also the 'good' and 'satisfies' in the last sentence seem somewhat weak and you might want to use stronger words. All in all, great response. :)
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