Undergraduate / 'My favorite color is blue, I like dogs' - Stanford Supplement: Roomate Letter [9]

In your roommate essay, the first part of the first paragraph seems to be a bit trivial. If you want to emphasize on ur love for sports, then you can add in more details or connect to some of your sports extracurricular.

Undergraduate / Stanford Undergrad Admissions - What matters to you and why? -- Trusting myself [8]

You have a lot of good details, but I dont see how you arrive at ur conclusion at the end. You might want to talk more about how does dancing lead you to trust yourself instead of just giving descriptions.