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Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Illness with no cure' - Yale supplement: is this Yale quality? [2]

Open ended Yale supplement 500 words or less.
Any suggestions for a title would also be appreciated.

My passion and fascination with biology run through my veins in every drop of blood. Why I suppose you would ask, do I, a young girl attending high school possess such strong feelings pertaining to one area of study. It is my hope that I can answer that for you.I'll start from the beginning.

When I was two and a half years old my father was diagnosed with Amyotrophic Lateral Sclerosis (Lou Gehrig's Disease). For the next three years I watched as my mother cared for my father. He changed from a strong, willful, independent man who would chase me around the house into a paralyzed, bed ridden man whose lungs finally gave out in November of 1999 ,one week after his 47th birthday.

Ever since I became old enough to understand exactly what had happened to my father in that he had passed away from an illness that had no cure, I began to try to raise money to benefit the research of cures for all types of muscular dystrophy. I held tag sales and bake sales to donate what then seemed a hefty sum to the Muscular Dystrophy Association. As I progressed through school I, like all the other kids in my grade, got an introduction to biology. Ths was a little window into what we would soon be studying in high school. It was immediately clear to me that biology was fun, entertaining even. For the first time I enjoyed studying and went out of my way to read my textbook. However, it didn't occur to me until I was in high school that the study of biology could lead to the cure for so many illnesses including the one that plagued my family ten years before.

In my biology class this year we are encouraged to pursue independent research to supplement what we learn in class. While I was exploring genetic mutations I learned that ALS was caused by a missence mutation in the SODI gene. I also found that scientists can direct certain types of neural stem cells to secrete a neuron-protecting protein that when implanted into rats can replicate without spreading the mutation. I then came across the mention of a new development made by Yale researchers involving the Lin28 gene and its roll in activating mRNA in cells to create protein that maintain stem cell function. I would be very interested in taking advantage of any research opportunities available to Yale students.

The research being done at Yale as well as the Yale Undergraduate Stem Cell Science Society are resources of which I would like t take advantage. Yale offers me the opportunity to pursue my dreams and excel in the field of biomedical research.
Ender1317   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / "Orange Candy Cravings formed my Destiny" personal essay [2]

Thus, in those days the value of money for me was indeed only a few "orange" candies which were all that the coin could afford

First of all, it wasn't at all about "the dream of being rich" which engrossed me towardswhen it came to money.

It was in those Economics classes where I came to learn the theories of money which run this entire world.

consider rephrasing this sentence I'm not entirely sure what you are trying to say: "Though my childhood queries on real world subjects have been vanished to the greatest of the extent,"

wondering whether the present economic turmoil could be eliminated through my understanding of the world economics.

Time has passed away , but my priorities haven't wavered

but still my desire for the information outside the hard covers of the book hasn't still burdened the life out of me. Although not innate, this engrossed lust for economics has certainly turned me into aeven thoughtful, intellectual human being.

I like your topic, it shows how your curiosity as a little kid who liked candy evolved into an in-depth look at economics and fueled your passion for gaining more knowledge in the future.

Red means consider removing or changing
Green means consider adding
Ender1317   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'India - my roots and history' - YALE SUPPLEMENT # 2 [3]

Together, we standmy family and I stand foras the common ground between India and America.

Thisit is my background of mine is whatwhich defines me.

It has led me to havedevelop different perspectives,

Both sides of this compromise represent variousdestinct parts of my identity and botheachsideshavehas influenced me in unique ways.

It'sit has brought me

It'sit is in India

and climbing houseon the roofs of houses

I look to India too in times of despair.

America, on the other hand, is the basis of myme now

It'sIt isherein America that I have the freedom to fail,

You may consider moving this sentence to the very end: "Together they are places I call home."
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