Essays / Need help on starting an essay on injustice (+posted essay) [9]

Start with a personal experience that opened your eyes to the fact that this world is filled with injustice.
Or maybe you read something in a book (preferably history book).

There are many injustices in the world.
Talk about Racism.
Talk about the mistreatment of women in countries like Persia/Iran.

Undergraduate / " Worship of safety emasculates greatness" - The CommonApp Transfer Essay [4]

Your essay is very good.
But isn't the limit 500? And the maximum flexibility is around 550.
Your essay is 779. Maybe you should cut down.

Undergraduate / " Worship of safety emasculates greatness" - The CommonApp Transfer Essay [4]

Go to print preview it will say 250-500. I'd stay below 600.
But your essay is very good.
But i think you overuse the phrase "satisfy my curiosity" and the word curiosity in general. Try mixing it up.

Undergraduate / 'finding this balance' - Describe your reasons for transferring [5]

Hey your essay is excellent. But maybe you should talk about why NYU is lacking in the Political Science department, and what you hope to take advantage of at your new school.

I like how you combined the social factors along with the academic goals that you are reaching for though.
The only thing is, the essay seems to be around 800 words? The common application (when you press print preview) will show that it has a 250-500 word limit. I called schools such as Johns Hopkins, Cornell, and Washington University in St. Louis, and they said they prefer essays that are close to the 500 - 580 mark because they read "hundreds of essays a day, and it would really help them out."