Undergraduate / U Of I Transfer - 'to start the new chapter of my life' [5]

This is just a rough Draft. I want to know is this a good start or should i go in another direction?

Explain your motivation to transfer from your current/previous
institution and how your academic interests and/or professional goals
will be fulfilled in your intended program of study?

1. When I was a senior in high school I made up my mind that I
wanted to go to a University. I had chosen a school that I was
interested in attending and I had the date scheduled that I would go
to orientation. The day of orientation came and went and I really
liked the vibe that school was giving off. I had my classes and my
roommate assigned to me and I was just eagerly waiting to start the
new chapter of my life, but unfortunately that day never came. At the
last minute my family couldn't come up with the remainder of the money
to pay for the tuition so I ended up going to South Suburban Community College.
This tragic let down took a toll on me for a while because I was
utterly disappointed that I wouldn't be at Xavier University. At first
I didn't take school seriously because I felt that there was no reason
to apply myself knowing that this is not where I want to be. One day I
decided that I would not let this situation take control of me; I was
going to take hold of the reins and control my life. I than let my
passion for not wanting to be their work in my favor. I know that a
lot of students would have let this hold them down because the
neighborhood where I am from frowns upon community college, but I knew
this was just a huge stepping stone that I had to get over to achieve
my ultimate goal, to be an obstetrician/gynecologist. I believe my
academic goals will be met because the University Of Illinois at
Champaign-Urbana has a program for my field on campus which will be a
great advantage for me.