Writing Feedback / Essay about whether creative artists should express their ideas in public freely [5]

Greetings!
As we know, art can contribute to the development of our society. But that is not meant that artists have freedom to express their ideas in whichever way they wish.

To some extent, I am for the idea that artists express their feelings properly. After all, our country is democratic, everyone has the right to show their ideas and feelings, including artists. What's more, the masterpieces artists create can enrich our culture, making our life clourful and attractive.

However, on the other hand, it is unwise for government to allow artists to express their feelings freely. Government should establish restrictions on artists. Here are some reasons.

Firstly some ideas related to violence or pornography is detrimental to teenagers, because most teenagers have no prominent ability of differentiation, so they are more likely to be misled. Take Japan for example. Japan is famous for its animations, but the makers of it (a kind of artist), add many violence elements to the animations, so the crime rate in Japan has been in a high level. Secondly, with a great many different ideas emerge, conflicts between artists will ensue. In history, many wars broke out due to cultural difference. So a creative artist can't bear other artists holding opposite ideas to him, especially in the public, this is a common sense. Last but not least, the mainstream values might be ruined by too many different ideas. So the ideas which go against the mainstream values should not be allowed in the public.

In conclusion, it is positive to offer creative artists a platform to demonstrate their outstanding abilities, but do remember they must do it properly and that needs the restrictions of the laws.

Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY: Why people are getting more and more weight and more and more unhealthy [2]

In many countries, there is a trend that the average weight of people is increasing but their levels of fitness are decreasing. In my view, unhealthy eating habits and the lack of physical exercise are the two main factors.

Nowadays, suffering from heavy burdens come from study or work, every individual is eager to lead a convenient life. It is no denying that cooking is really a waste of time so many people tend to choose fast food as their meals. When they come back home, the only thing need to be done is to put their dinner into microwaves and after dinner, they do not have to wash dirty dishes. Convenient as it is, people underestimate the fact that the junk food they have eaten contains a great many calories which will convert into fats in the body easily. As is shown by a study in China recently, about 20% teenagers eat fast food like KFC more than three times a week and approximately half of them are overweight.

Another main factor is the lack of exercise. As is well known to all, as we grow older, our metabolism rates slow down. Thus it is no strange that we will gain more fats even if we eat as more as we do when we were young. Due to that, it is essential for the old ones to take up more exercise such as walking, slow running, swimming and so forth. I am strongly in favor of this view because the older ones around me who take more physical exercise frequently are obviously healthier than those who do it rarely.

In this situation, government should take some financial measures to make green vegetables cheaper or raise the price of junk food. Just imagine, if people can't afford to eat junk food frequently, they may choose to eat more healthy food. What's more, some prizes should be given to those who always work out in sports centers, which can attract people to do more exercise effectively.