Andrew_Ts
Mar 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / Should school teach a young person on how to be a good parent? skills of good parent [2]
It is a widely held belief amongst many that S chool {the word 'school' only needs a capital letter at the start when it is part of a name..."} is responsible for making an individual into a good{I would recommend use synonym - proficient} parent. On the other hand, there is also a counter argument saying that School alone will not be able to transform an individual and P arents {Parents is not a proper noun, so in the middle of a sentence you should no capitalize it}are are equally responsible. Based on my personal experiences and perception, I feel that School can help in teaching and showing the path, but P arents, family and environment also play a vital role.
School lays the foundation for the development of a person. The different lessons thought and the projects undertaken help them understand the different concepts.{It seems to me weird... and I would ask somebody correct this sentence to the more proper maner.} But this would be theoretical in nature. Acquiring the skills to be a good parent cannot be taught in a straight forward fashion. They are the traits which get inculcated in a young person based on the different incidents encountered in his life. The environment in which you grow up has a huge impact on the soft skills which a person develops unconsciously. Parents can help children cultivate good habits if they are followed in the day to day life. If you are a good Parent then the scope of your children also becoming good Parents is high. This is because they learn a lot from the habits and environment.
Now let us discuss about the skills a good parent should possess. Firstly, I would say that patience and ability to accept ups and downs in a sportive fashion is one important attribute a person should posses to be a good{too much 'good' - sophisticated?} parent. This would encourage them and help not loosing their self esteem. Parents should not impose any kind of pressure on children and let the children identify their talent and move in their interested field. Another important skill a person needs is balancing the work and family life. Some people barely have any time for family or children and realize the unimaginable effects of this only after a long time. A Good parent will always be respected by their children and society and their children will become good{too much 'good' - worth-while?} citizens of the society.
Based on what has been discussed, it is evident that School, Parents and the environment play a major role in making good parents which inturn{in turn} results in developing a good{too much 'good' - successful and harmonious?} society.
Good job!!! :-)
It is a widely held belief amongst many that S chool {the word 'school' only needs a capital letter at the start when it is part of a name..."} is responsible for making an individual into a good{I would recommend use synonym - proficient} parent. On the other hand, there is also a counter argument saying that School alone will not be able to transform an individual and P arents {Parents is not a proper noun, so in the middle of a sentence you should no capitalize it}are are equally responsible. Based on my personal experiences and perception, I feel that School can help in teaching and showing the path, but P arents, family and environment also play a vital role.
School lays the foundation for the development of a person. The different lessons thought and the projects undertaken help them understand the different concepts.{It seems to me weird... and I would ask somebody correct this sentence to the more proper maner.} But this would be theoretical in nature. Acquiring the skills to be a good parent cannot be taught in a straight forward fashion. They are the traits which get inculcated in a young person based on the different incidents encountered in his life. The environment in which you grow up has a huge impact on the soft skills which a person develops unconsciously. Parents can help children cultivate good habits if they are followed in the day to day life. If you are a good Parent then the scope of your children also becoming good Parents is high. This is because they learn a lot from the habits and environment.
Now let us discuss about the skills a good parent should possess. Firstly, I would say that patience and ability to accept ups and downs in a sportive fashion is one important attribute a person should posses to be a good{too much 'good' - sophisticated?} parent. This would encourage them and help not loosing their self esteem. Parents should not impose any kind of pressure on children and let the children identify their talent and move in their interested field. Another important skill a person needs is balancing the work and family life. Some people barely have any time for family or children and realize the unimaginable effects of this only after a long time. A Good parent will always be respected by their children and society and their children will become good{too much 'good' - worth-while?} citizens of the society.
Based on what has been discussed, it is evident that School, Parents and the environment play a major role in making good parents which inturn{in turn} results in developing a good{too much 'good' - successful and harmonious?} society.
Good job!!! :-)