Undergraduate / Ability, motivation, attitude - personal statement [3]

I wrote a essay for college and its my choice topic and i wrote a essay so i just need to know that is it right or is there any mistake in essay.

Personal Statement

Ability is what one is capable of doing. Motivation determines what one does. Attitude determines how well one does it. What does Neha mean? It means the one who is loving and affectionate.

Being that I am from a foreign country has given me many privileges. My first language is Gujarati, then English. When I moved to the United States, I knew I had many things to look forward to because I knew I would have a better life here. My family has always been my greatest inspiration. They have helped me with many achievements and always motivate me to educate myself.

I am capable of achieving above my own expectations. I have a lot of confidence in myself; I have a good attitude toward life. I am now grow intellectually and spiritually I am getting older and wiser I know that God has great plans for me.

My goal is to gain skills that I need to lead a successful and productive life, to become well-educated in many things, to expand my knowledge of the world, to expand my comfort zone, and to become more productive. I want to become a businesswoman and I determined to win the goal and achieve what I want to become and my family strive to make sure I reaches it. My goal is to receive a full ride scholarship and to go college and make something out of myself.

After high school I want to attend a college with small class sizes and a strong Business program. I want to major in Business and I want to become an accountant. Accountants provide the data required to assess the present and future economic activities of individuals, businesses, not-for-profit organizations, and governmental bodies. I think this college school should accept me because I am a hard working student, and I want to aspire to become CEO in business. I want college to be a life-changing experience for my life and I want the four years of college to be the best. I want to get in to your college because I think it will make my dreams come true and I will achieve the goals that I need to become a businesswoman.

Undergraduate / 'From India, but lived in America' - admission my college education, experience [3]

Essay

I am from India, but I lived in America for five years. The characteristic that describe me the best is caring, loveable, social, and nice. I like to make new friends and hang out with friends and family. I feel like, I am very lovable person because I care for other people, and my family and everybody who care about me. I love to talk to my teachers and my friends and make them laugh. I just feel that when somebody is sad or need someone to talk to then you should talk to your best friends or someone who you like or trust to talk. I like to share my problems with my teachers and my friends. I want to major in Business. I want to be business women in future because I like to help people. I believe that while one may go to school to learn, that this is not the only place to learn. One's educational experience may greatly be enriched by outdoor fieldwork and hand-on exposure. This is what I would like to do. A good college eduacation is my primary goal at this time in my life. I would like to build a good future for myself and to make my mark in our society by helping others. Getting a good education is very difficult when one does no thave the funds to succeed. I like to participate in school activities. I am a Member of Future Business Leaders of America, Member of Asian Club. I like to play Volleyball, Tennis, and Badminton, and I also like to read, write, and working on computer.