Writing Feedback / 'End of the world 2012' - my research writing [5]

Your intro sentence. "I believe that 2012 won't be the end of the world because I feel like there's no way of telling the future. "

If there is no way of telling the future how do you know 2012 wont be the end?

Do not say things like "i feel like" , you should make yourself sound like you Know, not that you have a feeling about it.

I would for example word it like this.

It is extremely unlikely 2012 will be the end of the world, there is no such danger or threat to the planet that will destroy it in one day and it is unreasonable to think so.

You also say " there are many threats to the world ending"
There are as a matter of fact no threats to the world ending.
So overall i think you should change the attitude of your writing just a little bit i know it is a research paper but you should still do it.

I could help you further but you need to explain what your rubric is.