Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic :Overpopulation is causing problem in poor and developed both nations [2]

Hi Guys,
I am a new member of this forum and I will be going to give IELTS test on 12th may. I have written an essay on the following topic. I would like to request you to give your valuable recommendation and suggestion which will be more helpful for me. And I would like also request you to predict my IELTS scoring.

The world is experienced in dramatic increase in population. This is causing problem not only in poor, undeveloped countries but also in industrialized and developed nation.

Discuss the problem of that over population and give at least one positive solution.

I support to this opinion, overpopulation is creating problems in all over the world. Many kinds of harmful effects are being raised not only in the poor and undeveloped country but also well developed state. Reducing the amount of foods, increasing rate of unemployment, damaging environment effects are seen clearly due to the population growth.

In the first hand, many people are affected by poverty in the undeveloped nation. Firstly, dramatic increased population, also have been increased shortage rate of foods. Lots amount of foods have to consume however production is limited. Secondly, unemployment ratio is growing day by day which is also cause of growing size of population. Thus, such kind of problems invites "economic crises" in the countries.

In other hand, developed and industrialized countries also not far from this problem. The first problem is there is hard to maintain public service properly to their citizen. Second problem is, crime is also arising with the higher density of population. In fact, with the growing competition, people are searching new way to survive and they are adopting wrong approaches. Third one problem, environment can be damaged due to the overpopulation. Likewise, Global warming, Climate changes also effects of growing population.

However, we can minimize those problems to some extent. First of all, it is necessary to give education to the people especially to women. Similarly, governments also have to regulation for birth limit. China has the policy to one child ratio. This types of policy helps to control population. Eventually, similar policy might also be necessary in over crowed nation as India for example.

In conclusion, overpopulation creates danger effects for human beings so we have to be more conscious to mitigate this problem in the time.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Nuclear technology: Advantages and its risk [2]

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I have written an essay on following topic; please help me by correcting my grammar and structure.
You have living the nuclear age for over half a century. Since, the first atomic bombs were developing nuclear technology has provided with the ability to totally destroyed the planet.

Yet the technology has been put to positive use as energy sources and in certain areas of medicine.
To what extent is nuclear technology is a danger to live on earth? What are the benefits and risk associated with its use?

As a result of new innovation, nuclear technology is developed. This is causing of both negative and positive impacts not only for human beings but also environment. On the first hand, becoming of unlimited power, it has ability to destroy the planet, atom bomb for the instance. Nevertheless, on the other hand, it can be used for medical purpose too.

Nuclear can be exploited to produce energy at the cheapest cost with zero carbon emission which helps to fulfill the scarcity of energy to some extent. It is a small contribution which assists to make green environment. Although on the another part, very treacherous effects is invited by leaking trepidation, as a result people are living in trepidation each and every second .

Furthermore, technology is utilizing in certain area of medicine, treatment of cancer, USG, X-Ray are done by radiation. However, it has bad side effects too. It is very irritable and painful even, there is no certainty to success.

It is requirements to keep the nuclear weapon for the military purpose. Most of the countries are holding such types of weapon for their self defend. Even so, since, last few years, its competition is increasing among the rich and powerful countries. So, the chances of nuclear weapon war are arising. Second World War was also result of nuclear weapon. Not only two developed and industrialized cities Hiroshima and Nagasaki were destroyed but also more than half million people lost their lives.

In conclusion, although nuclear are very powerful sources of energy, if we use without proper way, it will invite lots of unimaginable harm too.