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Posts by barrywu
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Last Post: Dec 3, 2012
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May 14, 2012
Book Reports / 40 minute essay question on `Lord of the Flies` re civilisation. [2]

Golding suggests, through the characters and events of this novel that acting civilised {it is spelled: civilized} is a custom that is adopted by society,{;} however he also suggests that civilisation {it is spelled: civilization} itself may not be as strong as some would like to think.

=> itself is a pretty weak word. Please consider on using another diction.
Your word phrasing is awkward, since I cannot 100% catch on to what your are trying to express.

Let me try to help you get started:

In the novel The Lord of the Flies, Golding presents civilization through many different symbols, characters and events.
Even though civilization is adopted by society, being civilized is not as powerful as some people think.

Brother, you need to do a quick spell check since you have many "civilized" spelled wrong. "Civilization" is another major factor.

At first {Where? From the beginning of the novel?},we see {We do not "see", we "read"} Golding present (s) civilisation as something that binds all the boys to a sense of right and wrong {Try considering this: From the beginning of the novel, Golding presents civilization as a binding force, giving the boys in the novel a sense of morality.}. In chapter one the first thing Ralph and Piggy suggest is "we should have a meeting". {Try this: In chapter one [,] Ralph and Piggy suggested to the other boys that "we should have a meeting."} That this comes to Ralph so instinctively suggests that they are used to a world of order and communication. {Awkward, mate, this is actually a fragment!} This is further proven by Ralph announcing to the other boys that they must have "hands up, like at school". {Awkward, mate, this is actually a fragment!} Piggy is insistent on taking names and this sense of giving everyone an identity connects them further to civilisation. {Piggy's consistent name taking and giving each boy an identity further connects everyone toward civilization.}

I gave you a bit of help, but I hope you can make some changes so that I can reread it!

Your ideas and concepts are great; however, there are some punctuation errors, grammar errors and some sentences run "off the wall."

Thanks!
barrywu   
Dec 3, 2012
Research Papers / Raging Bull and Crazy Elitists - the Freedom of Information Act, Lippman, Chomsky? [2]

My prompt is: How does media play a role in controlling the average American mindset?

Throughout history, the elitists have eliminated the general public from the truth. They use six major corporations to filter out what information gets passed to the general public, through Comcast, CBS, Walt Disney, Viacom, Time Warner and News Corporation. However, when government papers get leaked out, such as the Pentagon Papers in 1971 by the New York Times and Washington Post, the raging bull goes on a rampage and damages everything in its sight. The government tried to prohibit the New York Times and the Washington Post from publishing portions of a secret government study on the Vietnam War since the Pentagon Papers will prolong the Vietnam War and hinder efforts to return U.S. prisoners held in Vietnam.

That is about it of what I have so far. Should I include the Freedom of Information Act (1967), Walter Lippmann , and Noah Chomsky?

Thank you!
barrywu   
Dec 3, 2012
Writing Feedback / Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food [11]

I known know I still weak my English muchI am still weak in English . So your critizinecriticism will help me betterimprove my writing .

There are some aspects that were argued that buying instant food ; either precooked or prepackaged ingredients will affect thiertheirunhealthlyunhealthy their health, which will become catalysts of obesity later.

You have really good ideas; however, there are many words that makes your essay inconsistent. I would recommend you to run your essay through an undocumented email, as there are many spelling mistakes and typos in your essay.
barrywu   
Dec 3, 2012
Essays / Argumentative research paper on euthanasia - Need help to organize the essay [5]

Try this: owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/01/

And here are some ideas about euthanasia:

From a moral perspective, do you think it is a right that is given to doctors to perform the art of murder?

Are there any laws/regulations given so that the patients will know the overall process that the doctor will give to him or her?

Do you think that doctors should give this option, or should they not despite they are the 'angels of healers,' which means that their jobs is to save people, not end people's lives?

From Hobbes, doesn't he say that it is against society's needs for someone to suicide since the person may have the potential to benefit society?
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