shelley G
Jun 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'Internet has exceeded the newspapers demand' - IELTS writing [5]
hey,Archu.
I think that your essay is too short,you can add more points,for instance,
you can talk about that computers can demonstrate more vivid and coclorful images which newspapers could not.
And in this sentence"Personally, I inclined to agree with the views that web has surpasses the newspapers."
"has surpasses" should be "will surpass",I mean there are a large number of people reading newspapers afterall.
hey,Archu.
I think that your essay is too short,you can add more points,for instance,
you can talk about that computers can demonstrate more vivid and coclorful images which newspapers could not.
And in this sentence"Personally, I inclined to agree with the views that web has surpasses the newspapers."
"has surpasses" should be "will surpass",I mean there are a large number of people reading newspapers afterall.