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Jun 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'UK student income during ten-year period' - IELTS table [5]
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The table shows the trend which took place in student income during ten-year period from 1988 to 1998 in United Kingdom.
Although the data of student loan was not available in 1988/99, it increased dramatically from 8% in 1992/93 to 24% in 1998/99.The percentage of earnings also rose sharply from 6% in 1988/89 and reached a peak at 14% in 1995/96, after that fell slightly by 2% in 1998/99.
On the other hand, there was a steadily decrease in parental contribution from 32% in 1988/89 to 16% in 1998/99.At the same time, the grant went down by 24% from 38% in 1988/89 to 14% in 1998/99.
Overall, the income per student rose gradually from 4,395% pounds in 1988/89 to 5,575% pounds in 1998/99 and the students became more independent at the period.
Hi everybody, I have just started learning IELTS writing,please help me proofread this essay.
-->reference:a file attached below
The table shows the trend which took place in student income during ten-year period from 1988 to 1998 in United Kingdom.
Although the data of student loan was not available in 1988/99, it increased dramatically from 8% in 1992/93 to 24% in 1998/99.The percentage of earnings also rose sharply from 6% in 1988/89 and reached a peak at 14% in 1995/96, after that fell slightly by 2% in 1998/99.
On the other hand, there was a steadily decrease in parental contribution from 32% in 1988/89 to 16% in 1998/99.At the same time, the grant went down by 24% from 38% in 1988/89 to 14% in 1998/99.
Overall, the income per student rose gradually from 4,395% pounds in 1988/89 to 5,575% pounds in 1998/99 and the students became more independent at the period.
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