Writing Feedback / IELTS - Essay about woman's place in society [3]

Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home, while others say that idea is outdated and that women should play an increasingly important role in the workplace of the future. What is your opinion?

There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in the society in last decades. Some people advocate the opinion that women should stay home, and others who are against this theory, believe in women's significant roles in the future workplace.

The first group who are mostly from traditional backgrounds, believe that males are the one who must work out in the society. For example, in most developing countries, children should be brought up by their mothers and this is the fundamental duty which females have and they must spend rest of their lives as a full-time housewife. However, for example, some countries like Saudi Arabia are wealthy and most of families have traveled around the globe and are familiar to modern cultures, their females do not have the right to drive, let alone having a job and work eight-hours a day with male colleagues.

On the other hand, there are school of thoughts that are opposite the first group. They believe in women's potential as a part of the society which, not only they can participate in society as an employee, but also they can be more responsible in their positions than males. You can see this even in political roles, since Germany has elected Angela Merkel as a prime minister, they have turned to one of the most successful countries in economics in Europe.

In conclusion, I extremely believe in women's powers and potentials in order to make the Earth a better place for living. It is quite clear that parents should encourage their daughters from early years to participate in communities which will lead them to their bright and successful future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Music industry and copyright reforms [2]

Many people in the music business feel that illegal music sites on the internet are a serious threat to the industry and more should be done to prevent them from operating.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Nowadays, world is becoming more obsess with information technology. Probably, it has several impacts on many industries such as musics and movies. Also, people in these industries believe that illegal websites publishing their products are the major menace to their career.

There are those who strongly convinced that publishing music albums illegally will result in death of this field. Because musicians could not get supported financially in order to produce more artwork. This issue, for instance, is more pressing in countries which do not obey copyright. Fans and advocates tend to either purchase copies cheaper from salesperson on streets or copy albums and artwork alternatively at home. Particularly, these illegal activities will affect musicians' personal lives due to their low incomes and investments.

On the other hand, there are those who argue that artists can benefit from illegal websites. For example, mostly these music sites are free and will not charge musicians for uploading and sharing their tracks and albums. Therefore, they can make people around the world familiar with their artwork easily. However, this theory is more beneficial for newborn artists who are willing to become popular and prominent celebrities. In fact, the majority of rappers worldwide have become famous and well known by sharing their own artwork on this kind of websites. Hence, they can be downloaded for free.

To sum up, I believe that both positive and negative sides are considerable. Moreover, I am convinced that reforms should be done regarding the copyright which allows artists, especially, musicians to make decisions on this dilemma.