Undergraduate / Eating pizza with a pair of chopsticks; culture difference, personal interest [22]

I only know that you may mail the colleges your new materials by providing your personal information and explain the reason why you are doing this change. That is what I did. Hope this helps.

Undergraduate / Common App Short Answer ( City Links program) [7]

I think you might misunderstand the City Links program. It includes the internship and volunteer activity which I am working with. Actually, I am writing City Links program as the answer to the topic.

Let us hear other people's suggestion. If it is out of topic, then I have to write a new one. Thank you.

I corrected it a little bit. Please take a look.

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer)
I have been participating in City Links program since this fall. It is a community service program that provides internships and volunteer activities.

The internship I chose is with Manager Information Systems, which provides technical support to public offices throughout the city. I have learned various computer skills through this experience such as how to diagnose problems, repair hardware and install systems.

As a volunteer, I am teaching high school students math and physics on weekends. Through this work, I am making new friends, consolidating my subject knowledge and improving my communication skills. I have become more patient with and responsible to my students.

As an international student who came to America less than a year ago, joining City Links has provided me with opportunities to improve my English, overcome cultural barriers, and make valuable friendships.

Undergraduate / Common App Short Answer ( City Links program) [7]

Dear all,

Thank you very much for your valuable suggestion. They are really helpful. I am still holding my own opinion. I think it looks fine overall due to my situation.

But I am not sure about the use of "absorb" and "consolidate" in the short answer. Do they cause any misunderstanding?

I have corrected it again. Does it look better? any confusion when you read it?

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer)

I have been participating in a community service program called City Links for the past five months. We are able to serve the community while gaining internship and volunteer experience.

The internship I chose is with Manager Information Systems, which provides technical support to public offices throughout the city. I have absorbed various computer skills through this experience like how to diagnose problems, repair hardware and install systems.

For my City Links volunteer work, I am tutoring high school students in math and physics on weekends. Through this work, I am making new friends, consolidating my subject knowledge and improving my communication skills. Meanwhile, I have become more patient with and responsible to my students.

As an international student who came to America less than a year ago, joining City Links has provided me with opportunities to improve my English, overcome cultural barriers, and make valuable friendships.