chizuru_shuchan
Jul 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS:Some people like to travel with companion other people prefer to travel alone [3]
It's my opinion:
- "Where do you travel this long holidays ? or Who enjoy with you travel?"
~~~~~~> "Where would you like to travel this holiday?" or "Who would be your partners?"
- First off all
~~~~> First of all
- If we enjoyed having with my companion it can saving the travel expenses
~~~~> If we enjoy have with our companion, we can save money from places like hotels or transportation payment,...
- In my openion I refer travel with companion because it can make the association in my organization.
~~~~~> In my opinion, I prefer travel with companion because it can make the association in my organization
In sum, you should pay more attention on your vocabulary and your grammar. It's quite bad
Regards
It's my opinion:
- "Where do you travel this long holidays ? or Who enjoy with you travel?"
~~~~~~> "Where would you like to travel this holiday?" or "Who would be your partners?"
- First off all
~~~~> First of all
- If we enjoyed having with my companion it can saving the travel expenses
~~~~> If we enjoy have with our companion, we can save money from places like hotels or transportation payment,...
- In my openion I refer travel with companion because it can make the association in my organization.
~~~~~> In my opinion, I prefer travel with companion because it can make the association in my organization
In sum, you should pay more attention on your vocabulary and your grammar. It's quite bad
Regards