Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1 Being Iranian-American [5]

I think this essay is good and shows emotion. One of my suggestions would be to expand upon how people judged you and how it made you feel. Also, some of the grammar is a little off, but I would be happy to help with that, too.

Graduate / 'emerging issues that affect the world' - Personal Statement Draft for MPH [3]

I think this is reallyy good! There is very little I would change. It shows true emotion too.