Writing Feedback / IELTS-Gender Equality at WORK or preferences for certain gender? [4]

Topic: Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Women and men are different in a fundamental way. Some people argue that there are jobs designed exclusively for either type of sexes. In my opinion, it is unacceptable that judging an individual's competence for a specific position by his or her gender.

Undoubtedly, both men and women have their advantages and disadvantages due to their gender. Men are supposed to be stronger than women in physical activities, while women have more patience for children that made them ideal carers for kids. But, this situation has changed due to the call for gender equality during the last several decades. For example, fathers have been asking to take more responsibilities for household affairs such as looking after kids, cooking or washing clothes, all of which have been undertaken by females traditionally.

Moreover, whether a person is capable of doing a certain job depends on the ability for the position rather than the gender only. It is universally believed, in the past, that people who could operate a plane are male. But nowadays, after a systematic training, women have mastered this technique as well as men have done. In contrast, male nurses could be seen in every hospital now. Men have successfully entered the field usually dominated by women. Additionally, if a male has been trained to be qualified in the nurse position, the physical advantage will make him more valuable for the hospital as well as patients.

In conclusion, jobs are designed to solve problems or make contributions. There is no reason to neglect a person who is suitable for a job in nearly every single aspect just because of his/her gender.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - Popularity of convenience foods wouldn't replace traditional foods [5]

Topic: Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In many parts of the world, people currently have a variety of choices for what to eat. Among these options, convenience foods have become progressively more popular with customers. Hence, it is arguable that people will become to rely overwhelmingly on this type of food in the near future. From my perspective, this trend is not the mainstream.

Compared with traditional foods, convenience foods are indeed more available to people who have insufficient time to prepare meals. In a world of economic depression, people who suffer enormously from a stressful work tend to take convenience foods as an alternative due to lack of time to enjoy a real dinner. In addition, convenience foods are less costly than the food we used to eat or make traditionally.

Nevertheless, both traditional food and the way they are prepared are unlikely to extinct. In the one hand, the chef who is good at making traditional meals is still one of the most respectable and skilled professionals, earning a substantial amount of salary and being hunted by many famous restaurants. The reason behind this fact is, obviously, that people are still in favor of old-fashion food instead of a convenient one. On the other hand, cooking is not just for living, but a lifestyle. The enjoyment from preparing a delicious meal for someone you love or yourself is always of importance and beyond any material needs. From this point of view, convenience foods bring no fun at all.

In conclusion, convenience foods which get people more accessible to food in a busy society are somewhat a useful selection. However, it cannot make consumers quit traditional food and traditional methods of food preparation by no means, both from a physical and a mental point of view.

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